regarding some deleted poem...	5-Apr-04/10:18 AM
dashes are throwing me off a little. Whats it all mean?
Re: Hologram glasses by zodiac	5-Apr-04/2:03 PM
I laughed, I cried. nice job.
Re: Hologram glasses by zodiac	5-Apr-04/2:13 PM
why didn't you just add a new poem instead of blowing this one away?
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Apr-04/10:29 AM
I know what you are doing...
Re: Poop! by dougsoderstrom	6-Apr-04/11:49 AM
please. go someplace else with this crap.
Re: Cynical? by baughworm	6-Apr-04/7:57 PM
line break between that/they're is ungood.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Apr-04/7:47 AM
I've thought of doing the line breaks like you have - it does make for a good flow, doesn't it.
Re: The Pear Blossom Highway by Shardik	7-Apr-04/7:48 AM
Yep, thats a keeper.
Re: A Quick Lick Of Yellow by Jeremi B. Handrinos	7-Apr-04/7:49 AM
I can appreciate the wordplay with the el sounds and the low sounds. Good consistent imagery; nice.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Apr-04/7:50 AM
hey, how bout a couple line breaks?
Re: The Kings of Paradise by Spindle	7-Apr-04/7:18 PM
All too many "all"s ... zodiac, you're starting to scare me.
Re: Martyrs in suburbia - (we wander like breezes) by zodiac	7-Apr-04/7:46 PM
Me wander? should be "I and Jesus and Joan..." and whats with martyr-dom? did you paste it from dictionary.com, by any chance?
Re: SEASON OF WINTER by galaxy4unknown	8-Apr-04/8:13 AM
What's all the DAMN YELLING in here?? My gawd.
Re: ritual of now intensified by nentwined	8-Apr-04/5:21 PM
nice to see you. linebreak after "slowly," right? This would be awesome read outloud.
Re: Lost Girl by niyama	8-Apr-04/5:33 PM
is you from 100poems?? I like this - lowercase "i" sticks out though.
Re: Knuckle Bait by niyama	8-Apr-04/5:36 PM
Should be more. Maybe less. I'm wonderin if maybe this could be combined with the one I just read...
Re: Wrath by niyama	8-Apr-04/5:37 PM
Good topic; feels fresh.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Apr-04/5:41 PM
Would be most excellent in the martini glass were not repeated. I like the cleanness of this. I'm gonna hammer it until you fix it.
Re: Beth by horus8	8-Apr-04/5:43 PM
I imagine some of the choppiness I read would be greatly smoothed by the singing of it. it works; sure.
Re: Three Bears by hotwire	9-Apr-04/8:04 AM
different. points for that. I really don't mind the lowercase "i" as a tool themselves, but the capital usage with "I'll" kinda wrecks it.