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SEASON OF WINTER (Free verse) by galaxy4unknown SEASONS OF WINTER
THOU HAVE COME NOW
WITH CHAOS AND FREEZE
WITH UNWEALTHY TREASURES
OF SADNESS AND FOAM
THOU ARE NOT AWARE OF
THE HURT THAT THOU HAS BROUGHT
FROM LAND UNKNOWN.
SEASON OF WINTER
THOU HAVE BROUGHT PAIN
THOU CAN'T IMAGIN BUT
MY TRUST FOR MY LOVE
WILL NEVER FAID
I WILL FOREVER STAND BY
MY BELOVED FOR SEASONS TO COME.
Up the ladder:
The Blood
Down the ladder:
hello eternity
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.1666665
Posted: April 8, 2004 3:58 AM PDT; Last modified: April 8, 2004 3:58 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.7758822 Overall Rank: 11360 Comments:
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anyone @ 156.99.105.188
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8-Apr-04/6:18 AM
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Foam in winter? A couple of spelling errors.
Yes, you need to fix the spelling errors, and I would not use "thou" so much (if at all).
I HAVE THE SAME PROBLEM - MY KEYBOARD ONLY HAS CAPITAL LETTERS.
What's all the DAMN YELLING in here??
My gawd.
Use King James English consistantly or not at all. THOU HAVE COME NOW -> Thou comest now, for example.
Yet to stand by your love in the hard times is like getting through a hard winter - good thought. 136 view(s)
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