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SEASON OF WINTER (Free verse) by galaxy4unknown
SEASONS OF WINTER THOU HAVE COME NOW WITH CHAOS AND FREEZE WITH UNWEALTHY TREASURES OF SADNESS AND FOAM THOU ARE NOT AWARE OF THE HURT THAT THOU HAS BROUGHT FROM LAND UNKNOWN. SEASON OF WINTER THOU HAVE BROUGHT PAIN THOU CAN'T IMAGIN BUT MY TRUST FOR MY LOVE WILL NEVER FAID I WILL FOREVER STAND BY MY BELOVED FOR SEASONS TO COME.

Up the ladder: The Kid
Down the ladder: In black and white

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.1666665
Weighted score: 4.7758822
Overall Rank: 11328
Posted: April 8, 2004 3:58 AM PDT; Last modified: April 8, 2004 3:58 AM PDT
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[4] anyone @ 156.99.105.188 | 8-Apr-04/6:18 AM | Reply
Foam in winter? A couple of spelling errors.
[6] wilco @ 24.176.102.131 | 8-Apr-04/6:29 AM | Reply
Yes, you need to fix the spelling errors, and I would not use "thou" so much (if at all).
[5] zodiac @ 67.240.155.144 | 8-Apr-04/7:48 AM | Reply
I HAVE THE SAME PROBLEM - MY KEYBOARD ONLY HAS CAPITAL LETTERS.
[n/a] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.52 | 8-Apr-04/8:13 AM | Reply
What's all the DAMN YELLING in here??

My gawd.
[7] deleted user @ 68.66.196.168 | 8-Apr-04/2:29 PM | Reply
Use King James English consistantly or not at all. THOU HAVE COME NOW -> Thou comest now, for example.
Yet to stand by your love in the hard times is like getting through a hard winter - good thought.
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