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Lost Girl (Free verse) by niyama I'm not sure when
things started to slip
When 'miss' became 'ma'am'
suits became things to suffocate
instead of swim in
and freckles turned in to spots
Perhaps the traffic was too loud
or maybe it was the ticking
at my back, but i never heard
the doors closing behind her
when she left
Up the ladder:
He Kissed Me
Down the ladder:
C.
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Posted: April 8, 2004 5:07 PM PDT; Last modified: April 8, 2004 5:07 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.190725 Overall Rank: 4700 Comments:
lowercase 'I' sticks out, and "in to" seems it should be "into". But yes. :)
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I like this - lowercase "i" sticks out though.