Re: A Few Minutes' Reflection by longships	2-Sep-02/5:16 PM
i question the question marks. otherwise it's labia majora implora and honeysuckled bee thigh. 8/10u
Re: Wondering by anagram	2-Sep-02/5:21 PM
i really was looking for any reason to pull out my kale gun on this one.....but the last three sentences...made me think saturday morning cartoon symbolic brain washing at it's finest. jung would have grinned briefly...briefly.
Re: the art of dreaming (screaming) by brazen	2-Sep-02/5:38 PM
alright...change the title to "the art of dreaming (screaming), and change "ground" to 'stud'...and "pound" to 'shudder' ...change the word "the" to "no" and vice versa...to create a more courageous approach to a poem that's been written 5 million and twenty eight third times. change the word "my" to 'that'..trust me...oh and switch "birth" and "death" also...this is your editor speaking...if you don't make these changes i will not be held accountable to the damages rendered.a
Re: wHEN mY wATER rUNS dRY by Sigh'ense...	2-Sep-02/6:00 PM
i expect better from you young man...fix the capital problem a whisper is always heard before a shout and it's not at all stylish...but if you did something like.....when my water runs......[i crawl swear] the crop that..........[cranium sigh]there is no healt......[cataract clear] you know what i mean? be more creative with your() and<> and ``~~~~~''//// trust me it's much more effective than just shouting...and also look up an ode...i hardly would consider this a royal point to be made...it's definitely lyric....for a run down on style buzzez check out horus8's last 5 or six poems and also nentwined does some style flaring contrasts occasional and there are quite a few others, but you'll see it when you see it, and this is only 50% there...i could whip this bastard into shape in ten minutes if i was your editor...shame realy...let me know...i might be able to get you in on my calander...let me know. carry on.h
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Sep-02/1:35 PM
because we can, and it creates an alluring paper trail...back story..
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Sep-02/4:27 PM
qui transtulit sustinet.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Sep-02/4:29 PM
qui facit per alium facet per se.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Sep-02/4:36 PM
aliquando bonus dormitat Homerus.
Re: More 7-Eleven holdups. by Bachus	6-Sep-02/8:02 PM
hey sis! thanx...could you revote later when you get a chance..i re-edited...the wife and kids home too so, you know...if you want to talk to nad. love jb.
Re: More 7-Eleven holdups. by Bachus	6-Sep-02/8:35 PM
thanks...have you tried the soup? i hope you have...i believe your id has been developing these days also...you'll have to excuse me..i have to step out for the friday night hustle...we'll speak again soon. bye.
Re: knots... by anatheman	6-Sep-02/8:41 PM
my sister has got you pinned...lol! i would say days..fuck hours...there are so many knots here that it's gordian, or freudian, or perhaps pathetic and pointless..therefore you fail..so flush! my kale gun has a bead on way...i pray you're not allergic to9 calcium..like the the last one..bend over please..t'ankyou.o
Re: More 7-Eleven holdups. by Bachus	7-Sep-02/1:47 PM
yeah! a solid 8 inches of hard hoodlum cockiness. Do you think it was wrong of me to not rape them all, plus take the money...i'm a ham for those convenience store cameras. smile.o
Re: The punch drunk underwriter by horus8	7-Sep-02/4:55 PM
well z..the first part "mine, theirs etc"...sets up a metaphorical analyses of my familys self destruction...in the form of a bad acid trip spent reminiscing years later, the second part "coming of etc".. is me still on the acid thinking about my baby sister (the youngest) and how difficult it must be for her growing up with her father in jail her entire life thus far (13 years) and since i myself hadn't seen her in quite a number of years also at the time( cuz i was in the navy and traveling alot on the east coast and through out the world) so i was speculating on how she might have been evolving into a young woman without a good role model (the inscest part mentioned in the beginning has to do with my other sister closer to my age having grown up not seeing me her whole life, and being told by our mother that i was already born when she met my father <mother denied my gestation and birth> so my sister thought that we weren't siblings so when we first met in salt creek california when i was 21 and she was seventeen. she fell in love with me, and would make passes at me daily...because she truly didn't believe that i was her brother (which we were half brother and sister), in fact all of my siblings are half blood with me cuz i am my parents only child, and they each remarried four times (i have four brothers and two sisters) still thats not a very positive thing to tell a child, at any age (that you are not related when you are) i knew but she wouldn't believe me no matter how hard i tried to convince her that what she was feeling was wrong.. cuz my mom had told her that she was her first kid and i was her step son her whole life (she grew up in hawaii), and since we never really met until we were older it caused some serious shit to hit the fan, cuz i let her seduce me one night to spite my mother and reverse her lie with a little black magic...i knew my sister would eventually tell her, exposing my mothers mental wickedness and illness...served her right...except it blew my family even more beyond its already ruined levels...of madness and selfish denial coated greed..<i was just so fucking pissed that i lost control> i suffered many years with the guilt, and still do...the third part (still on a bad acid trip) is about my heroin addiction that spawned from all of this guilt and insanity "before bed" implying my years of fighting addiction and how it affected my relationship with my highschool sweetheart who i was with for five years..i told her everything and we tried to help me, but i just hated myself to much for even her love to save me..and the last part "sixteen lost" (still tripping, refer to the mention of ergot infirst part) is about when i lost my mind and my earliest writings and everything i owned, and all of my friends and family and my well being and much much more...i couldn't remember any of the poems by heart only pieces, so i collaged it all together with different titles i remembered and some lines that couldn't be forgotten..basically the marquise de sade's last supper. i did it with a basic rhyme scheme at the beginning of it....to show the immaturity and childish frustrations that were controling my decision making abilities....hatred and revenge can warp a sensitive beings better judgment and linger forever tainting...no matter...i made a mistake...i forgave myself though, and all of them too...for the sake of my future mental health...i hope that will clarify a few things for you z... sorry for being so cryptic...good afternoon, luv horus's litigator. Bachus.r
Re: Mean Matt was so mean, when a homeless guy asked him for change he gave him a -blank- by beakism	8-Sep-02/9:16 AM
if i had a 4 inch penis with no mushroom helmet...i would be a little resentful too, but hate is such a strong word...try ,..'i hoof you' i hoof you so much, i through a shoe! nice beak.....nice poi...your diversity has me at ammends..
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Sep-02/2:23 AM
gee, isn't this the lily of the valley? why the counter offensive..feeling guilty about spending all of your time behind a two way mirror. just kidding. not. oh ah..nice pee stain 8/10!? dude you nrrd a thorazine enima.
Re: Swimming by [mojo]	10-Sep-02/11:42 PM
INDECENTLY INNAPROPRIATE! what the fuck are you gabbering about...our small pud in christof's mouth with piping hot bravado(oh! what imagery 9!)....fuck-it! wear your tuxedo...hows that for imagery....what a waste of invisible ink...vanish?! your mojo is minus beak. see my kale gun ...duck! 2/10!
Re: Sacrificial Sanity by Twisted Wizard	11-Sep-02/2:31 AM
i'm on to you! and i'm not saying what i know or how much i got for it? why do you talk to your penis so regrettably?. burn with magnifying glass. poke the poodle. you have terrible taste in pasta , and your mom drank all my beer. herpes will be your down fall(faggel the proud) if not a well necked chicken bone. good luck.! puppet of love. michael jackson's soiled rhinestained glove....RUN! RUN! YOUR TITS ON FIRE! EVACUaTE.... CHECK YOUR CLEFT FOR MOTHER..false alarm ...you're my hero......zero!
Re: My Mamma's Hands by amateurR	14-Sep-02/12:50 AM
see pete! that's why hippies talk alot of shit , but in reality they know shite? it's about the dullery of taking care of incompitent others (that you love more than hate !?) and skillfully wishing for hot sexy lusty longterm love and adventure. not death .twit . you say 4 ..i say double. you want trouble. cuz i got a tipping plate of it.fucker. 8/10.
Re: We visited the gay men on the veranda by Frass	14-Sep-02/2:10 AM
you're such a fag.....lol! "brotherly", as you secretly queef in the night....sounds more like a boring bunch of queens to me...oh yeah...and redundant. enjoy!f
Re: Inside by Jagang	14-Sep-02/2:13 AM
i like how you throw the "his" in at the end. takes the attention off of you. 7/10.I