Re: Time by mozac	31-Aug-02/4:02 PM
it needs more...time?
Re: Time by mozac	31-Aug-02/4:02 PM
it needs more...time?
Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8	31-Aug-02/4:22 PM
1) i have seen you many times appologize, not for your poetry, but for forgeting a line out of it while you were orating,(melrose coffee house last year, whittier coffe house 4 or five years ago) and i'm just saying...fuck the line, nobody knows but you, replace it with a random connecting thought.improv, act, retract...nobody want's to hear anyone read something from a paper or from the inside of their minds...here's a thought ..relive it each time anew...it stays fresher, 2)and what kind of advice to you suggest i give to some of these kids...huh..your creative writing lesson of the week?...i fucking help the ones that i can, in a more creatively inspiring manner, by making them think in outside terms? this is not a poetry workshop for fucking teaching cads and cretans it's poemranker...there is no need to sit and explain to them all , "hi, i'm god's wife i think you should listen to more t-rex and read blah blah dickinmouth ble. here capitalize this, erase that, stasnza blee.....cuz i'm god's wife which makes it what. worthy? wow you're right sorry, after all your god's wife...... okay here ye here ye the wife of id will be selecting a group of twits for a good grinding all aboard!...some shit just isn't that easy...you either got it, or you don't. you do, and so does babbit,and dark angel isn't at all a serious writer?, and neither is bachus? or whitman? or shaskowski? cuz they're just playing? fuck that this is a forum, fight or sit in the stands, but teach in another corner that's your job not mine. i say push until pulled!
Re: Autophage by Cha no Onna	31-Aug-02/4:42 PM
trahison des clercs!
Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8	31-Aug-02/4:58 PM
because you sound ridiculous and self righteous, as if you're above it all...and for the sake of whatever lets just say two of the five (actually closer to ten) you didn't falter and forget a line..there...you also didn't appologize then giggle and go back to read it again from memory for a crowd of hormonoley inept coffee tasting brutes going wow sweety i like your tits keep on reading that high falutin trash talk, i'm gathering up a chubby over here....who cares..what difference does it make? oh so what even god's wife is above making mistakes and appologizing? you're right...folks she's never appologized for anything and she's right...i'm just attacking her, because i'm insensetive and in a rut?........you are hardly worth your two cents let alone the pocket dig. sorry, you can keep it, no appologys...i know when i'm bested...i'm just going to go piss in the corner now and pretend that god really does have a wife and if he does, i now know the reason behind his absented presense here, you obviously have everything under control.
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Aug-02/5:14 PM
pull what together? i'm fucking sick of her! stay on your side of the fence holder of the sac of nentwhistle....just cuz you got high ten years ago and are still reeling from the weight gain..means not your words have merit or weight...in fact i know who you know, and they know very little, which causes me to speculate on whether or not what you know is really even what you know...how has it come to that you might ask yourself?....simple...you are merely a figment of someone elses imagination..a projection...hollow particle spectrums...rectum-fiably turned of or on by the click of a mouse...then what has happened i spoke to a particular who mentioned a bump into and then a suprise...what and who is the tall skinny lad, and why is he so cool and goth..ah because he's a thinker and not a blade sinker..not so pale...not so poor...not so impressive. a mere mortal..you mr friend are a childs hand msking shadow puppets on a wall that's for sale every minute every second, if you hurry you might get that new animals shape down...before it's to late...you are to late. p.s the shame is that in real life you even introduce yourself as dark angel, and in my book my friend that is weak, and why you started writing to begin with back when the bullies started beating you up for being different...right around fourth grade. enjoy your success.call me.
Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8	31-Aug-02/5:37 PM
unfortunately your user name has everything to do with it..you fucking chose it! and that says alot, oh maybe you were just kidding, and what if i only saw you twice, doesn't change what i saw...and i will prove to you just how fucking self righteous you sound by posting a piece of all of your comments i've cut out, and then you can be the judge of yourself...i keep a paper trail to back up my arguments...i just think it's a little fucking egotistical to give advice on something none of us even remotely comprehend, proof in that look around you! AND FUCK YOU WITH your evaluation of time for who, i'm supporting two fucking people in a rent zone three times your budget with a mouth full of cock in the trenches...while you sit in orange country teaching what creative writing? i fucking dare you to quit your job and for three years try to make a fucking living in the indusrial machine 'art' 'artist' my fucking left nad...nobody gives a shit about that..only what they can make a buck on, and destroy the beauty of...you missed your window...go preach to the preachers daughter she needs your fucking geomancy much more than i ever will....feed that chicken beinge, and tell me the future. here let me tell me for you...better batten down the hatches kid cuz here...it...comes...some, highs,some lows, some wins, some losses...blah blah blah keep your head up, blah blee vlah...it's always been and it always will, and there is no way to teach it...so you end up sounding, on screen extremely self righteous. sorry, i'll be the first to mention all of my faultes, but why do you cling to this pathetic approach...fuck shut up and write about some other pretty bird that gets knockerd up. again and again...or perhaps "the trouserless three" the clergy cospiracy..blah blee blah. horse shit! fucking avon horseshit no wonder you fucking are chummy with christoff, you have alot in common.alot.
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Aug-02/5:49 PM
i'm sober and livid, but all in good fun, kids i've never even left my home before so all that i've said has to be negated. sorry, perhaps i will drink now and smoke before i toe nail the vagina, and regrettably say something that i regrettably say, or not say.said bed? head? lead astray oh...no..no...lets all be friends and enjoy everything the way it was meant to be ejoyed..on it's back!
Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8	31-Aug-02/5:51 PM
to late .bachus did that with da's comments in a geishas burlesque~aforethought. sorry next
Re: Last Words by anagram	31-Aug-02/6:02 PM
no.
Re: Variance of the tapeworm by horus8	31-Aug-02/6:27 PM
D.a! damnit! you are a bastard, and no fun...i really thought you you were a cream filled doughnut and not a doghnutless cream, ah well...maybe next time our tango will be more static and less stated. luv the one who was but wasn't that which you found worth talking silent shot puts for the love of track and field and the 'game' i am touched by whovers creation that was and moved to break wind and drop some friends off at the pool...cordialy yours, forevered! and sooner than you think. prepare!
Re: Award shows make my cock hard, but you don't by Bachus	31-Aug-02/7:12 PM
please stop...he starts(axel rose to run up and down the stage, but he's no young thang anymore, so he winds up winding himself bad than he can't finish singing welcome to the jungle it's a bit sad. really.
Re: Variance of the tapeworm by horus8	31-Aug-02/7:16 PM
no.
Re: -=Dark_Angel=- & The Canon Episcopi by Bachus	1-Sep-02/6:27 PM
i wasn't reposting it 'spuds' (doylum's nickname) i re-edited it, there were some unsavory typos before...and besides no one will stumble upon it anyway cuz nentwined and d.a have rigged the fucking random effect.elitist bastards! down with the facist pigs!y
Re: Life Jade by OneFingerAnswer	1-Sep-02/6:32 PM
i say ten! cuz of the fourth line. a mistake that saved the piece. 10/10/10/biglistlessbirds.l
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Sep-02/6:37 PM
tell me about it.s
Re: Ignored by PK	2-Sep-02/4:38 PM
the missing conjunctions and past tense seeping into present....maintains the pieces dynamic...barely...7/10?
Re: God's Rod (toilet drink poem) by horus8	2-Sep-02/4:40 PM
is this why the europeans and canadians despise you?..nay..nay...you sir, are an unlit minora..
Re: The Call of Duty by waltfreakinwhitman	2-Sep-02/4:55 PM
i see you're fond of torpedoing. i'm fond of nothing.i'm not fond of you. henchman..
Re: The Astronomer's Lament by Christof	2-Sep-02/5:12 PM
congratulations something of yours that didn't make me want to clocktower the rifle scope.