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Time (Free verse) by mozac
Time Illusions mirrors reflections in a flight without wings like the wind burning inside Within a tiny voice within a whisper a secret forever silent but heard through closed eyes and love perfection a path without ends rising and rising tears wordless expressions beauty inside outside inwards outwards lost found a rhythm a heart a song without words in my heart in my soul look and see sights eyes sounds you me eternal gratitude eternal bliss in one inspiration in one, timeless, moment

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7637
Posted: August 31, 2002 3:03 PM PDT; Last modified: August 31, 2002 3:03 PM PDT
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[6] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 31-Aug-02/4:02 PM | Reply
it needs more...time?
[6] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 31-Aug-02/4:02 PM | Reply
it needs more...time?
[7] blueyes @ 205.188.209.14 | 28-Dec-03/10:15 AM | Reply
I think you wrote this very effectively. You keep presenting cetain images and pacing an layering certain word together in order to keep the reader drawn in. Sometimes that's hard to do with this type of poem.
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