on some deleted poem
15 Oct 2003, 3:24 PM
If nothing else, at least it resonates. Somehow.
on some deleted poem
15 Oct 2003, 3:25 PM
A little too sentimental for me, made me think of the time i left a teddy bear uner a tree and it moulded. Good use of language, though.
on Guess the place! by Patsy
15 Aug 2004, 3:55 PM
Oops. Dilapidated. Anything else? i could find anything, so.
on The Redhead In The Subway by wolfen
3 Nov 2003, 10:13 PM
it seems strange that such a...dirty...poem should rhyme. No matter, i like it.
on At least while you're gone, things get done. by Bachus
3 Nov 2003, 10:12 PM
You have a creepy kind of foreboding tone, which, whether intentional or not, i savour.
on Nocturnal Emissions by EAger to Offend
3 Nov 2003, 10:15 PM
"I lick my plate
And meditate" won me over.
And meditate" won me over.
on some deleted poem
3 Nov 2003, 10:10 PM
Mmm. tangible wistfulness.
on it's a new crayon by FreeFormFixation
4 Nov 2003, 12:58 PM
like a love poem, only yes and only no.
on on a more positive note by calliope
4 Nov 2003, 12:59 PM
is the title ironic, or are you a cynic?
on my stuff is like stuff by skaskowski
4 Nov 2003, 1:00 PM
Owie! but good. imagery. mm.
on some deleted poem
4 Nov 2003, 1:01 PM
i think it means god.
on some deleted poem
28 Nov 2003, 10:39 PM
Fascinating. Am intrigued. Hesitate to call favourite, since i seem to acquire a new one all the time, but would like to know more of this: recent? And what are the spiders?
on some deleted poem
18 Jan 2004, 10:41 PM
Well, you're honest.
on The back of a shovel? by horus8
18 Jan 2004, 10:46 PM
writing from real life?
on some deleted poem
4 Jan 2004, 8:14 AM
i had not read this one for a while. Coming back to it, i like it even more, possibly because i have been listening to Bruce Co(ck)burn and find echos of him in here.
on some deleted poem
5 Jan 2004, 3:16 PM
i enjoy the second half much more than the first, save for the delicious "wild cells". "Scar shower", too, is enough to take one. For some reason it seems uncharacteristically short for you, but that is neither here nor there--just observation. Now who knows what? i need no point-fives for this.
on romance and chorus lines by unknown^user
11 May 2004, 12:00 AM
i am taken in by your imagery and your self-assured-ness. (real word? don't know)
on Kept by <{Baba^Yaga}>
11 May 2004, 12:02 AM
i don't know, what kind of virgin runs with a point?
this tasted like the desert/dessert. yum.
this tasted like the desert/dessert. yum.
on some deleted poem
6 Oct 2004, 11:32 PM
Realized i had never commented on this. Am taken with it, a year later.
it reminds of you then, harkens you now.
Do not step on my shadow.
Do not step on my shadow.
And such was the Fall."
Renders an indelible sadness. (not of real events, i'm not sublimating here-i mean taken by itself)
it reminds of you then, harkens you now.
Do not step on my shadow.
Do not step on my shadow.
And such was the Fall."
Renders an indelible sadness. (not of real events, i'm not sublimating here-i mean taken by itself)