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The Redhead In The Subway

Member since 2003 · Posted 3 Nov 2003 · 2 comments

She starved my carnal appetite, And temptation was introduced, By a redhead in a shopping mall on singles night, I was wired, she was fused. Animal attraction is a rabid beast, It hungers desire and hunts for the feast. Passion led us to a damp subway wall of graffiti, A vagrant uttered his disgust in profanity. I heard my lovers scream in her echoes, Performed for my fantasies dressed in long shadows, That oscillated like a newly restored clock, Two hands moving slowly in time unable to stop. When I came,she looked at me nervously, not knowing what to say, We touched fingers in a strange kind of handshake, Inside I felt like the 1912 earthquake, And without looking back, She walked nonchalantly away

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[8] scitz 3-Nov-03/9:11 AM Reply
mmm
[9] Patsy 3-Nov-03/10:13 PM Reply
it seems strange that such a...dirty...poem should rhyme. No matter, i like it.