Re: a comment on The invisible man by Hostileintent	16-Aug-03/1:19 PM
i am 18 my endgame is to express myself through words effectively i would like you just to tell me what is really bad, what is good, and to rate them.thanks
Re: Mi Casa es Su Casa by <~>	15-Aug-03/8:02 AM
aged:18 endgame:self expression through words how far you're to go:general gist
Re: Rearview mirrors by horus8	15-Aug-03/7:55 AM
thanks for the review
Re: 'Where I come from- S.M.C!!' by Hostileintent	14-Aug-03/4:01 PM
READ READ READ READ READ READ never thought of translating it sorry. here is the translation for the last two stanzas: Yes.Sport is extremely important Perhaps it's the most important But the don't put an emphasis,on sport as a whole What about free development, Nothing I now understand the life of the teenager I see it's full of filthy dirty injustice But overall- Saint Munchins College has brought Me to a man from a naive teenager *************************************************** the sport refers to the fact that my school always prided itself on its sport,but the fact is that it is a rugby school.rugby only.other sport is shunned.so i say 'how can one develop freely' READ READ READ READ READ READ
Re: Incomplete by Hostileintent	14-Aug-03/3:56 PM
thanks for the comments and support everybody.much appreciated.
Re: Incomplete by Hostileintent	14-Aug-03/3:55 PM
yea. i put this poem in last year in a competition.got to the semi. when in school i studied the work of Gerard Manley Hopkins. i loved him,and his so many unique styles. i just took one, which as you said is, splitting the line up into two,and putting the first part last.thanks for the comments
Re: The Wooden Armchair Of Similar Dreams by Caducus	14-Aug-03/3:17 PM
first of all, thanks for the comments. second,i like it.it is, what seems to me, to be quite nostalgic.i duno, i have always had a thing for personal and nostalgic poetry,and this fits in here.very well written. 10
Re: missing time by Bill Z Bub	14-Aug-03/6:30 AM
good use of imagery and emotion.creates a nice scene in the mind.i like it. question:any chance you could review 2 of my peoms? 'Memory' and 'Incomplete'? i would really appreciate it
Re: Fall Of The Heartlands by Mr Pig	13-Aug-03/4:28 AM
supreme. i like the feeling in it.the imagery is so vivid. question:i have asked a few people to look at the last two in my list,would you too?
Re: Speaking my mind. Brilliant Idea! by thepinkbunnyofdoom	13-Aug-03/4:21 AM
I like it.Very symbolic. question:any chance you could look and review mine, the last two on my list?
Re: The Bloody War Of Angels by Caducus	11-Aug-03/7:15 AM
a work of art.lessson for us all.
Re: The Adulterous by Caducus	11-Aug-03/7:09 AM
how is that a poem?
Re: Bed by swift_enterprises	10-Aug-03/6:48 AM
come on, a bit of effort.nice imagery, but it could be much better