| Re: Eenie Meenie Minie Moe by Edna Sweetlove |
14-Oct-06/5:16 AM |
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| Re: Limp Cock by Edna Sweetlove |
14-Oct-06/5:13 AM |
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| Re: Toe Jam Poem by EDNA by Edna Sweetlove |
14-Oct-06/5:05 AM |
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| Re: Musical Buttocks - Cha cha cha by Edna Sweetlove |
14-Oct-06/5:04 AM |
i really like the 'left an unfinished movement on his piano stool'.
i like the first four lines too. but after that ...
but come on...'FART'..AGAIN??!! you practically mention them in all your writing.you mention your name again..you mention sex again..you mention the word 'fuck' or a version of it again..
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| Re: Fun At The Gynaecologists by Edna Sweetlove |
14-Oct-06/5:00 AM |
once again edna. paint the picture perfectly (probably because you tell it like a short story), but go nowhere with it. i really have to agree with dvincent..its like a story, not a poem. is there a structure to any of your poetry??if their is, please tell me, because i would genuinely like to know.
and if you feel like telling me to get lost fine.. but fuck off from my writing too.
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| Re: Wanking In The Bucket by Edna Sweetlove |
14-Oct-06/4:50 AM |
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you paint the scene well. but dont do it justice.
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| Re: Wind By Any Other Name by Edna Sweetlove |
14-Oct-06/4:49 AM |
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what was the point of that?
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| Re: A Tragic Love Tryst In The Park Near The Sewage Works by Edna Sweetlove |
14-Oct-06/4:44 AM |
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| Re: Memories Of Home by Edna Sweetlove |
14-Oct-06/4:41 AM |
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thats the type of thing you would write straight from your head onto a page when drunk. sorry dame edna
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| Re: A Poem For George Bush by Edna Sweetlove |
14-Oct-06/4:28 AM |
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edna talking crap again. free speech is cool, but thats more like an article in the paper than a poem. it don't deserve its ratings
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| Re: a comment on Confession of a troubled man by Hostileintent |
14-Oct-06/4:22 AM |
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please explain. we are not all as educated as you
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| Re: Figid Rrigid by Hostileintent |
11-Oct-06/4:30 PM |
tried a new format for this one....what do people think??
1underlying message (danger)split into its letters, each letter to start a sentence
2each sentence is 10 syllables
3each sentence composed of 2 parts
1st part of two words
2nd part of 3 words
4first and second words of each part relate
5last word in each line different, but rhyming????????
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| Re: A Sexy Crucifixion Poem by Edna Sweetlove |
11-Oct-06/4:47 AM |
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disgusting. try changing the characters to your mother and brother and see if its still as good.
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| Re: how my life is dying by Hostileintent |
9-Mar-04/4:59 AM |
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i'm miles from home,i'm pissed off. i'm hurting,i'm in a cafe,and i write.i write
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| Re: A Lovely Surprise by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
23-Sep-03/7:38 AM |
interesting
well worth the 9
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| Re: In Memory of Princess Diana by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
23-Sep-03/7:37 AM |
i like it. its clever.
10
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| Re: a comment on Boys with Guns by Hostileintent |
19-Sep-03/7:20 AM |
i fucking lived in one of these places. ive seen it so fuck yourself
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| Re: a comment on Boys with Guns by Hostileintent |
19-Sep-03/7:20 AM |
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you sad bastard. go fuck yourself, you snob. 'where can i find such pictures' he asks. well ill tell you, amnesty international.
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| Re: That Girl by Nicholas Monson |
17-Aug-03/10:30 AM |
the last half of the last line is kinda out of tune with the rest, but all round, i like it. 9
take a gander at my one 'confession of a troubled man' tell me what you think,in a vote or otherwise
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| Re: Confession of a troubled man by Hostileintent |
17-Aug-03/10:24 AM |
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please put a vote on the poem, bad or good, just vote.any comments are more than welcome
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