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Figid Rrigid (Free verse) by Hostileintent Deadly driver, dangerous driving slow
Always blocking, never upping motion
Nowhere punctual, newer people wait
Getting later, nearing panic station
Every gap, constatly chances taken
Rigid slow, unchanging speed. Wait
Up the ladder:
Remember the Day
Down the ladder:
Bottom half of a phone
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.8
Posted: October 11, 2006 4:36 AM PDT; Last modified: October 11, 2006 4:28 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.9761596 Overall Rank: 8371 Comments:
Form aside, (what does it matter?)it's a good observation, but what does "punctual" and "newer" have to do with it?
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1underlying message (danger)split into its letters, each letter to start a sentence
2each sentence is 10 syllables
3each sentence composed of 2 parts
1st part of two words
2nd part of 3 words
4first and second words of each part relate
5last word in each line different, but rhyming????????