| Re: Healing by hobojo |
27-Feb-09/5:56 AM |
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| Re: Bacchus and the Ivy by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
27-Feb-09/5:56 AM |
"and why it might"?
Has a good lyric sense to it, but it feels like too much nonsense, too. A touch of bob dylan, a touch of the beatles, and other things I recognize but can't name--but I think more it winds up just "touched".
Then again, 6am, I might be reading too much or too little...
In the end, I enjoyed it, and that's always a plus.
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| Re: no title by Dovina |
27-Feb-09/5:54 AM |
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:heh: I had some trouble with the transition from 1 to 2; and 3 felt somewhat cheap.
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| Re: My love is drowning in PCP by T. Jonathron Remp |
27-Feb-09/5:53 AM |
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I like "shine spasm". The rest doesn't work so much for me.
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| Re: panpragmalogoethospathos by malpaso |
27-Feb-09/5:52 AM |
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interesting. there's chunks and cake and nugget here. but kind of disheartening to pick them out of the puke. refine?
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| Re: a comment on brain cookies by nentwined |
26-Feb-09/9:56 PM |
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| Re: a comment on in this bus terminal of the future by nentwined |
14-Feb-09/9:05 PM |
It definitely goes in cycles. But this one's definitely more of a downer than previous ones.
In the bus terminal of the future... poemranker is the writing on the wall.
I'm thinking of making it iPhone-friendly.
Any thoughts on how to get fresh blood? Just need people reading and commenting and voting... or more typically just commenting and voting ;)
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| Re: Mountain Fever by Celticai |
14-Oct-08/7:12 PM |
As someone else wrote on one of your poems--"get out of my head!" Feels very much like something I would have written ten years ago (though I never really went for staircases).
That said, I find a lot of your words redundant (and in such a way as to render their compatriots less powerful). And the piece as a whole is missing some novelty, flow, or something to set it apart from a multitude of poems like it. Perhaps you can make it more personal?
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| Re: Words by Celticai |
14-Oct-08/7:09 PM |
There's a lot here, some I'd like to see plumbed more deeply, some could well be spun off into its own ruminations ((striving to capture the correct word could be a novel, I think; then, I didn't get enough sleep last night))
The flow feels more like you're trying to find the poem (which is how I tend to write, myself, so maybe I'm reading too much into that). As it stands, I find it too clunky. But lots of promise.
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| Re: a comment on A List of Names Worth Listing by SupremeDreamer |
29-Jul-08/11:58 PM |
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Just a note--I'm actually getting all of his "comments via email" as bounces. But they're fun, so don't mind me.
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| Re: a comment on Magazine Promotion by nentwined |
29-Jul-08/11:55 PM |
How do you mean where is it? http://www.gudmagazine.com/
It's churning along, right on (some vague sense of) schedule - our fourth issue went to print yesterday. :)
Removed the banner from poemranker because I decided I'd rather have the ranker running than a stupid ad nobody clicked on. I have the relatively unobtrusive links at the bottom, still. :)
Seeing some old faces of a sudden, and it feels good :D
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| Re: a comment on Magazine Promotion by nentwined |
29-Jul-08/11:53 PM |
I hope so. But on that day I couldn't seem to. :)
And it's kind of tough to make worldly something I normally just whine about--sort of a system purge. But hopefully it was interesting anyway.
Thanks :)
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| Re: a comment on Cinematic Indulgence by nentwined |
22-Jul-08/3:51 PM |
Thanks :)
Any thoughts on where else you would have liked to see it go, or questions you would have liked answered?
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| Re: Purple Reign of Blood by Kamikaze |
2-Jul-08/2:40 AM |
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definitely something many folks have envisioned with glee. the rhymes are blatantly forced (with pseudo-poetic grammatical restructuring and all that goodness) ... good for a quick chuckle?
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| Re: The United Face of Totally Grody by Shardik |
2-Jul-08/2:38 AM |
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ow. I couldn't read it. great job of "what the hell".
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| Re: We can all be free with our legs by daggatolar |
2-Jul-08/2:37 AM |
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strange. but I still don't know if I want you to go around with your legs open. what happened to good old crawling around with nothing but your arms as motive force?
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| Re: There can be only one by Shardik |
2-Jul-08/2:36 AM |
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definitely has something (situational plot). If you could inject a little more context and a little less highlander...
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| Re: Under a better bed wetter by Shardik |
2-Jul-08/2:35 AM |
hilarious, but doesn't really do it for me as a poem. goes on a bit much, and while you get kudos on "lugubriously", ... eh. thanks for the cheer anyway :)
I know you weren't going for "quality", but there's room for art in it anyway. Though one man's art is another's bed wetting, sure...
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| Re: FOR YOU!! by kristie24 |
2-Jul-08/2:33 AM |
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definitely one for the pimple archives. rhymes/spelling/content ... hurt ...
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| Re: a comment on in this bus terminal of the future by nentwined |
2-Jul-08/2:31 AM |
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