| Re: coming out by pete |
23-Apr-20/3:23 PM |
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| Re: Everybody's Gone by impert&ent |
23-Apr-20/3:21 PM |
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damn. nailed it for me right now.
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| Re: Lazy Pindaric Ode Blues by pete |
23-Apr-20/3:19 PM |
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| Re: a comment on A terzanelle on the subject of the moment by Adriaan |
23-Apr-20/3:10 PM |
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| Re: a comment on protest chant by nypoet22 |
23-Apr-20/3:09 PM |
Just make sure all food is well cooked! ;) [I only darkly jest]
Interestingly, ... corporations /are/ dying of the plague....
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| Re: Year of the Cucumber by Dovina |
23-Apr-20/3:07 PM |
I stumbled a little at "feel"/"feel with"... flows better without to me. (why wallah vs. voila? If you were a cucumber? :) )
"no wanderlust" might be "no lust for wander"?
More food for thought than I expected.
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| Re: Birb by Aetius |
23-Apr-20/3:00 PM |
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Poignant. I think I've been that bird.
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| Re: Weather poem 13b by nypoet22 |
23-Apr-20/2:59 PM |
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| Re: a comment on bitrot by nentwined |
21-Apr-20/11:34 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Bill of Rights on A4 by T. Jonathron Remp |
1-Nov-17/10:51 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Bill of Rights on A4 by T. Jonathron Remp |
1-Nov-17/10:36 AM |
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It's a failure of the poem or myself, I don't care which. For me, this critique.
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| Re: Sense {non} by Skamper |
30-Jan-15/1:39 PM |
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the second stanza is your poem. drop the rest. maybe explore that more, or maybe don't. 6 for the poem as whole.
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| Re: The Spell(Alice part I) by alvinb |
30-Jan-15/1:36 PM |
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I really like the potential of the first two stanzas, but the rest disappoints, for me—give me more color, more shifting, more playing with vision (other than bright/dark). Though loss poems are particularly hard to do, in that the general doesn't connect and the particular may be too particular. And they are done, and done, and done--but try to dig into more senses, cohere it all, and don't give up....
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| Re: Some of us by daniella |
30-Jan-15/1:31 PM |
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| Re: Untitled Future by ARTIE |
30-Jan-15/1:30 PM |
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I like how it leaves me hanging, but that's all that strikes me....
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| Re: Pakistan school massacre by Dhanesh M Kumar |
30-Jan-15/1:30 PM |
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some nice images (or well-coined/well-conveyed), but doesn't really work for me as a poem.
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| Re: Bill of Rights on A4 by T. Jonathron Remp |
30-Jan-15/1:28 PM |
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not following...nice flow/sounds.
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| Re: A mag that PAYS??? by SupremeDreamer |
30-Jan-15/1:27 PM |
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It paid semi-pro rates regardless; the "if it sells" was the long-tail dream of icing on the cake.
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| Re: One Fine Day by ARTIE |
30-Jan-15/1:26 PM |
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| Re: Why we're here by ARTIE |
30-Jan-15/1:25 PM |
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Consciousness exists to destroy itself—from pain to pleasure, to make the pain go away—and retreat back to the nothingness from whence it came.
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