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Free verse № 160084

Bill of Rights on A4

Member since 2004 · Posted 23 Dec 2014 · 6 comments

In between the weaving weaves on the lamp in Rasheed's Trailer, a breathing breathed a damp trail in the hole between the bowling alleys on 4th Street. The space elevator music was a bore in a beaker, I feel asleep on the floor like a tweaker, Hawking snored out his speaker. Keep an eye on my feet. Dribble dabble, I can pass the basket babble. Two points, three points, alley oops holy moly. Basketball would be mo doops with a goalie. Shaolin, I see ya frownin, imagine the score 4 to 4 Raid the fridge, mon. My Mongol empire lived on pigeons. I will only be happy if I can link together two solid tori carved from different trees:

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6 comments

[n/a] nentwined 30-Jan-15/1:28 PM Reply
not following...nice flow/sounds.
[n/a] T. Jonathron Remp › nentwined 1-Nov-17/10:30 AM Reply
A message from all of us: Please understand something before you critique it.
[n/a] nentwined › T. Jonathron Remp 1-Nov-17/10:36 AM Reply
It's a failure of the poem or myself, I don't care which. For me, this critique.
[n/a] T. Jonathron Remp › nentwined 1-Nov-17/10:38 AM Reply
For clarification: you.
[n/a] nentwined › T. Jonathron Remp 1-Nov-17/10:51 AM Reply
I love you. :)
[n/a] T. Jonathron Remp › nentwined 1-Nov-17/10:54 AM Reply
I'd hope.