regarding some deleted poem...	2-Oct-03/1:17 PM
entwine is one of my favorite words, but I'm sure there are other reasons I like this poem. quite fun. :)
Re: Why do you give yourself blue tens? by Bachus	2-Oct-03/2:26 PM
565 :blink: 566. funny how quickly one can read 'zero' when not paying attention. la. I don't like the way you use the title, but... no, I don't like it. That is all. self-rewarding tens do not attract green brethren You are a zero.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Oct-03/3:01 PM
cliche'd cliches tossed on to look like depth.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Oct-03/7:22 PM
yes. :)
Re: power by livingcanvas	8-Oct-03/7:49 PM
I like this; simple, but really gets a rhythm.
Re: Song of Spring by meror	11-Oct-03/4:39 PM
cute. :)
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Oct-03/4:55 PM
I'm curious as to whether the gun is to be used against or in defense of the child, or something else entirely.
Re: the two faces of the bar social. by darby pyn	12-Oct-03/8:16 AM
knives 'drove' -> 'driven'? relatively interesting piece for an 'angst' poem. couldn't quite get into the flow.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Oct-03/8:20 AM
nice juxtaposition.
Re: She wishes by INTRANSIT	12-Oct-03/8:37 AM
I read this with pain. 8.
Re: 3am by Nicholas Jones	22-Oct-03/6:50 AM
I'm particularly fond of that ... particular time. This is very cute.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Oct-03/9:06 AM
I remember this one. I like it much, this pain. Well, of a sort. You represent it well. Though "come to sleep" seems disjoint with the sweaty, slick passion ("come to bed" seems like it would fit the two views/times better, but perhaps that's just my own reality).
Re: paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined	12-Nov-03/6:04 AM
:studies line 4 carefully: thank you. Dribble didn't throw you? ((there's movement for the b's to be replaced by z's))
Re: Holding on for Jesus by Everyone	11-Dec-03/7:47 AM
For sarcasm, this is pretty fun.
Re: Don't Care by LuV_jOhNnY	6-Jan-04/4:58 PM
Catchy, yet says nothing. I can't say I like it.
Re: Fuck by devilishnutcase	6-Jan-04/10:46 PM
certainly a lot of fuck. repetition is annoying, forced rhymes hurt, painfully cliched, couldn't find any sort of flow or rhythm... this should be 'pimple poem' instead of 'free verse'. fuck?
Re: Sonnet Eighteen by devilishnutcase	7-Jan-04/12:39 AM
what crack _are_ you smoking? or whose?
Re: Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT	6-Mar-04/11:41 AM
Odd. The conversation makes a bit more sense of it. But odd. I think I want more about the elderly couple, their interaction with her (if they were there with her, or if they just were all sitting at the same table). How old is she? Hmm.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Apr-04/3:54 PM
the first stanza is cute; the second a bit awkward. the third more awkward. and the fourth, more awkward than that, for me, and I'm afraid I don't understand what's supposed to be going on, or what the message is. :/
Re: Swan Lake by Caducus	8-Apr-04/4:27 PM
The subject matter is so, so, so done. And yet, I love the twisting of your language, and you do so much with the imagery. I hate you. :) "sorrows pebbles" versus "sorrow pebbles" or "sorrow's pebbles" did confuse me, though.