regarding some deleted poem...	17-Sep-03/6:15 PM
'viberant' -> 'vibrant' I'd split the stanza at 'back/Now' and 'forgotten/Now', to leave less confusion. I like the gimmick a bit, though the content is... well, "it's a stage we all go through".
Re: untitled by craig	17-Sep-03/6:16 PM
cute. is the spelling on purpose? I can't say I enjoy that part of it.
Re: An Illuminator by hobojo	17-Sep-03/6:16 PM
eh? 7 for confusing me because I'm tired of giving out 4's.
Re: Strung Out On Sunlight by J.B. Manning	17-Sep-03/6:17 PM
some nice ideas. I don't feel the flow lends to the feeling of sleep deprivation (even though it may have been created by such; I could find much of one)...
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Sep-03/6:18 PM
Whoohoo! 9.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Sep-03/6:20 PM
screw the rhythm (gently?) I like this. =) [[okay, a little work. but 9 as stands]] I guses that's the mood I'm in?
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Sep-03/6:20 PM
Ask who?
Re: Up for a game? by LuckyJoe	17-Sep-03/6:21 PM
cute imagery, flow I think could make this really nice. 7.
Re: lament and retrograde by Don-Quixote	17-Sep-03/6:22 PM
I like 'too proud to scrawl' (as elsewhere read), though then the wheelchair might need something to replace it. interesting, though. :) 7.
Re: reflexion - dayspring to dusk by DreamerSupreme	17-Sep-03/6:24 PM
pullulating? has a good tone/rhtyhm/feel. 8.
Re: The Khat by Bachus	17-Sep-03/6:28 PM
very nice. 10. I'm wordless.
Re: No place by skittles	17-Sep-03/6:29 PM
definitely something to be put on the wall.
Re: The Sahu by Bachus	17-Sep-03/6:30 PM
very cool. :) 9.
Re: on the edge of creation by nentwined	18-Sep-03/7:40 AM
as a note, this is part of a "poem a day for 100 days" challenge. so if it's particularly lacking, that could be why. I'm posting the (probably 1/10 as things draw on) few that I think might have a chance at redemption.
Re: A Haiku Haiku by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	18-Sep-03/10:43 AM
very interesting form. it took me a few to get what you'd done. actually, a few more than that, really. almost a minute or two of unrelated thoughts until it popped in (oh). as for the content. cute, mostly amusing. 8 for ingenuity and the mostly amusing.
Re: nentwined gets nasty by Johnnie Baptiste	19-Sep-03/9:23 AM
wyrd to yo mudda.
Re: by jessicazee	22-Sep-03/6:11 PM
:snaps fingers:
Re: under my skin by bitter	22-Sep-03/6:14 PM
I think this could make a very interesting painting; you definitely got enough imagery there. I stumble for cadence on the second line. If I had a 'personal favorites' section implemented, this would be added to it just for the picture I'm seeing. On the off chance that I'd try to paint it someday. meanwhile, I'll just make a note to myself on skwerms.org. :) 7, still, for its slight awkwardness, and I don't see it going over an 8, for content. odd, that.
Re: Junk by Bonehiss	22-Sep-03/6:28 PM
"and live in fear all the while" has stresses in the wrong places. "gotta learn to defend" is missing a syllable. and same with "all your junk 'til the end"--but that you can just make "until" and it's good to go. (btw, till is used in "to till a field"), the one you're wanting is the shortened form of "until". the apostrophe replaces the "un", and there's no need to add an l. beyond that... nice, simple poem; with rhythm tweaks, I think this would be solid, and in any case is good to get out of the system. :)
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Sep-03/8:20 PM
yep. really need to work on your flow on this one, too. the form of the piece is not conducive to persuasion, nor is the lack of punctuation. If you want to get your point across, with any poem, (or with any thing in life), you have to make your rant respectable. (or are we just flinging mud, here? why call this free verse and put it up for rating, when you can smear your lipstick all over the urinals in the "suggestions" area?) If you are simply here in the hopes of having your ego stroked, your are more naiive than your years. If you are here for honest criticism... well, you might find some. I do my best, when I can find the time. But really, what can you expect from a site that touts itself as inspired by "hotornot"? It is the internet. Hear it roar. It is ugly. It is fine. It's where I sometimes speak my mind. Some others simply scream and shout, roll in feces, and throw it out. And if you're one of the regulars just pulling our chains, well, I just wasted several minutes coming up with this response. I hope you're proud.