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lament and retrograde (Free verse) by Don-Quixote
words quiet sighs chaining me yet, my hands are deformed not fit to hold pen or pencil with eyes non compos mentis directing its course obstinate, demand to be given a wheelchair since legs do not have strength to stand or walk. too proud to crawl

Down the ladder: bumblebee robot

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.3333335
Weighted score: 5.3585887
Overall Rank: 3306
Posted: September 16, 2003 11:47 PM PDT; Last modified: September 16, 2003 11:47 PM PDT
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[n/a] impert&ent @ 82.36.27.74 | 17-Sep-03/7:40 AM | Reply
Tis fine. Even though I misread/rewrote the last line as I read it: Too proud to scrawl.
[n/a] DreamerSupreme @ 66.81.145.47 > impert&ent | 18-Sep-03/10:05 AM | Reply
-smile- indeed, you are a poet. nice suggestion, but like nentwined said, it would require cutting/modifying the wheelchair bit.. hrmm.. i might write a second version.

thanks.
[8] DurtKL @ 24.160.181.70 | 17-Sep-03/12:57 PM | Reply
pretty good stuff
hello

[n/a] DreamerSupreme @ 66.81.145.47 > DurtKL | 18-Sep-03/10:06 AM | Reply
long time no see, where have you been?
[7] nentwined @ 209.31.226.178 | 17-Sep-03/6:22 PM | Reply
I like 'too proud to scrawl' (as elsewhere read), though then the wheelchair might need something to replace it.

interesting, though. :) 7.
[n/a] DreamerSupreme @ 66.81.145.47 > nentwined | 18-Sep-03/10:06 AM | Reply
thanks. :)
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