on Cool In The Army by wilco
18 Jun 2004, 8:34 PM
Not bad, no, not bad at all. Blessed with nine.
on A parking lot, a smoke, and the pleasure of being alone by thepinkbunnyofdoom
18 Jun 2004, 8:31 PM
I like it as is, except you could have added a line break after "I'm somewhere."
That said, you are blessed with ten.
That said, you are blessed with ten.
on Deja Vu by Jeremi B. Handrinos
18 Jun 2004, 8:27 PM
Bravo.
replying on mutiny by Bill Z Bub
10 Jun 2004, 8:45 PM
I was wondering if I perhaps should have hunted you down to disturb your hibernation. Welcome back, and take this blessing of nine- I liked the poem, but the line breaks made it a bit confusing, though I suspect that was your intention, somewhat.
replying on The Ocean Prefers A Sunset by wilco
10 Jun 2004, 8:36 PM
Well, my latest villanelle is a writers block piece.
Villanelles are considered to be well suited for expressing unsettling issues that a poet has, etc. so I figured it would simply be a matter of time until I wrote a vill in response to writers block. for some it worsens the block, but it eases my imaginative stiffness when it plagues me.
You could try that perhaps, or something other than a lyric- since, in my experience anyway, writing lyrics aren't effective during writers block.
Villanelles are considered to be well suited for expressing unsettling issues that a poet has, etc. so I figured it would simply be a matter of time until I wrote a vill in response to writers block. for some it worsens the block, but it eases my imaginative stiffness when it plagues me.
You could try that perhaps, or something other than a lyric- since, in my experience anyway, writing lyrics aren't effective during writers block.
on Even manic dreamers must face Atropos by SupremeDreamer
10 Jun 2004, 7:45 PM
My writers block villanelle. Hope it isn't too whiny.
on The Ocean Prefers A Sunset by wilco
10 Jun 2004, 7:09 PM
Well.. you know, this doesn't look as if you put all the ability you have into this one.. if it were to be sung, I think it would come out lame. Theres the potential for this to be extended and improved though.
In the mean time, I bless thee with five. Go in peace.
In the mean time, I bless thee with five. Go in peace.
on Of Painting by thepinkbunnyofdoom
10 Jun 2004, 7:01 PM
I like it. Loaded with attitude. Blessed with eight.
replying on The curse of language and other scattered thoughts by Y2kSlamPoet
10 Jun 2004, 6:43 PM
Well, yeah.. kinda.. but I really wanted to see the response I'd get from posting this bloated and disordered rant on poemranker- I was expecting a general reaction similiar to that expressed by zodiac. heh.
replying on Bitter bacardi makes the black stones dance. by SupremeDreamer
10 Jun 2004, 6:26 PM
I didn't expect many to feel this one, I wrote this for my amusement when I was drunk. But it serves it purpose in revealing some of my kinks with villanelles at least.
replying on The curse of language and other scattered thoughts by Y2kSlamPoet
7 Jun 2004, 9:45 PM
That works. Could have said that in the first place. Why didn't you?
replying on The curse of language and other scattered thoughts by Y2kSlamPoet
7 Jun 2004, 9:29 PM
I quote: "but the path has been laid out for me, I need only the courage to walk it."
That does imply a predestined direction, or maybe I'm mentally warped. I believe its both. But yeah, it doesn't really matter in the end.
That does imply a predestined direction, or maybe I'm mentally warped. I believe its both. But yeah, it doesn't really matter in the end.
replying on Le Sommeil- Slumber by Sasha
7 Jun 2004, 9:26 PM
You should post a longer version. ;/
on A life unsure by sliver
7 Jun 2004, 9:23 PM
Well, that earns a nine in my book. Nothings better than a nice good edit.
replying on Bitter bacardi makes the black stones dance. by SupremeDreamer
7 Jun 2004, 9:19 PM
-shrug- Don't remember your tequila worm piece.
replying on The curse of language and other scattered thoughts by Y2kSlamPoet
7 Jun 2004, 9:17 PM
I never mentioned giving into one basest desires, but I did mention facing ones darker psyche. As for desire, everyone gives into their desires atleast once if not many times- any who say they never have? are frankly lying.
What I've come to know, for myself, is that:
No path is a road to freedom until you have paved it yourself.
So wonderful goodies for you, your followin down the lil yellow brick road. Theres not much courage in following a direction, having to choose and walk without yellow bricks for comfort is brave, and independent- I prefer that over anything else.
What I've come to know, for myself, is that:
No path is a road to freedom until you have paved it yourself.
So wonderful goodies for you, your followin down the lil yellow brick road. Theres not much courage in following a direction, having to choose and walk without yellow bricks for comfort is brave, and independent- I prefer that over anything else.
replying on Bitter bacardi makes the black stones dance. by SupremeDreamer
7 Jun 2004, 6:27 PM
There dimwit, are you proud of me now?!
replying on Bitter bacardi makes the black stones dance. by SupremeDreamer
7 Jun 2004, 6:25 PM
Why me marm, who else silly?
Despite that, I'm compelled to give it a nine. It's honest, funny, and pushes the right buttons for me.