| Re: The Swallower (Oh brother!) by Spanish Devil by Bachus |
3-Oct-03/11:09 PM |
ah horus, i fear i might be getting a tad soft
but, thankfully your always at attention with parody musicals..hrmm, there must always be carnivores to do vegan population controll, or a bell man with the most painful copper echos.
does my "im being gentle" mask suit me? or do i need to get more goddamn plaster and better molds?
as usual, your satire is a well crafted stand up session- 10.
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3-Oct-03/11:15 PM |
hrmm. your point could be made clearer with a tad more simplicity in language.. course, im not one to discourage dictionary exploration
(webster is annoyed, ive ripped many corners and smudged the occasional few letters.)
but- the thing to keep in mind is: what is your goal? abstract, straightforward, inbetween? etc.
for now, i give a 7.
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| Re: Before My Mother's Thighs (A free purse) by Spanish Devil by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
3-Oct-03/11:19 PM |
your certainly on a mission, thats for sure.
hows your night?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
3-Oct-03/11:40 PM |
tender? the sun might be colored like an apricot, but i dont think id risk taking a bite: teeth can melt.
tender, then mentioning soft infant bellies.. perhaps overdoing the details can get redundant, make your point and tighten the output..
how the poem sparks and bangs makes a huge impact on how it affects the reader.
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| Re: Aluminum Shackles - Titanium Quills by SupremeDreamer |
4-Oct-03/2:56 AM |
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oh my.. im really fired up.. notepad shall be sore before the day is done..
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| Re: Who are the best poets on poemranker? (A list by me) by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
4-Oct-03/3:23 AM |
aye, i made the list..
and ive only just gotten out my slump
pleasantly surprised.
but i liked the intro much more, i like nodding profusely. the list rocks, and i there arent many that could replace you as judge.
anyway, enough yammering- i have to catch the next updraft and fly again (i didnt get these damned wings for nothing)
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| Re: Often, I'll sit down to pee by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
4-Oct-03/6:52 AM |
does she have pony tails and a mini-skirt?
8.
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| Re: Aluminum Shackles - Titanium Quills by SupremeDreamer |
4-Oct-03/8:51 AM |
Long debate.. and darky, heres some deleting!
im sure you can post the soon to be MIA comments for all to behold.
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| Re: Aluminum Shackles - Titanium Quills by SupremeDreamer |
4-Oct-03/8:53 AM |
one lil x button.. its like playstation "ya know"
bazooka'd city hall while nuking the white house
coooool eh?
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| Re: Aluminum Shackles - Titanium Quills by SupremeDreamer |
4-Oct-03/8:58 AM |
btw folks, its bad to have these loose ends like cuisine, because its a sign of some odd little blemish that will lead to some scandal. beware.
Oh, and folks, "i have just covered up the proof of my retardation"
BUT- getting all comments via email means that.. i can really post it all.. anyone want me to do that?
(copy pasting from IE is quite easy, i just need to get the order of the messages right.. )
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| Re: Primal Reality by peaceseeker |
8-Oct-03/12:14 AM |
what the hell is with the short lines? its damned annoying to read it in that fashion- specially since i dont see its purpose, and its written in a fashion where jaggedness doesnt suit it.
my only complaint- blessed with 7.
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8-Oct-03/12:16 AM |
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Quite a tasty write. blessed with 8.
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| Re: Shoe Hole by Bobjim |
8-Oct-03/12:20 AM |
want me to donate some sandals?
blessed with 7
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
8-Oct-03/12:26 AM |
Carmelites were MEN.. friars..
i dont think they had a nunnery.
this is too loaded with mush.. bleh. 2.
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| Re: My Instructions or My Tongue In My Cheek? by Patsy |
8-Oct-03/12:32 AM |
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quite good, id say. blessed with 9.
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| Re: Dancing on Glass by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
13-Oct-03/5:24 PM |
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bunny wabbit, ltns. ace poem btw. 9.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
13-Oct-03/8:24 PM |
nice. did terrorists blow up the moon.. one day theyll do that too.
9.
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| Re: Evel Knievel's last bananna split   by horus8 |
21-Oct-03/4:44 PM |
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enjoyable read, blessed with 9.
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| Re: Nathan - under the sun by SupremeDreamer |
24-Oct-03/12:41 AM |
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| Re: Nothing beat the 90's for An over view of American culture by Shardik |
24-Oct-03/3:24 PM |
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look who gets the last laugh.. hrmm. wonderfull. 10
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