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Nathan - under the sun (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer
(For Nathan 1984-1999)
It was bright today,
under the sun.
nothing was there to say
when my friend held the gun
chrome barrel pointed to his dome.
He chuckled, and kept a smile
"let me fly free"
a tear strolled while
he called out this plea.
I watched calmly,
"What do you expect on the other side?"
"The sea, blue and cold, carressing me"
"I bet it would be one hell of a ride."
Its bright today,
under the sun.
nothing was there to say
when my friend held the gun
chrome barrel pointed to his dome.
His eyes rolled as the bullet passed
grinning still, silence came after the explosion.
It was quite a commotion,
blood running into the gutter.
People ran, my feet planted to the ground
eyes glimpsed as my friend slept
within the cement ocean.
He looked so peaceful
under the sun.
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Posted: October 24, 2003 12:40 AM PDT; Last modified: October 24, 2003 12:40 AM PDT
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