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Aluminum Shackles - Titanium Quills (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer -
Did you- Did you,
and I repeat,
DID YOU
insinuate
That these words were spilled
from my veins in order
to make clear to you - the reader
what exactly I am communicating
in verse and thought?
Are you suggesting that
me, the poet, has wrists
that are enshackled,
forbidden to choose obscurity
since you no longer enjoy
the subtle art of mystery
and the game of uncovering
secrets laid within these words?
I know no rules, abide none
but the ancient law of pen
and consiousness.
I challenge my fingers
and the eyes of others-
offering variety and color.
Pabulum is abhorred
by you and your kind, and I am left
only to speak thus:
My inkblade detests the lazy
and those whose insight only glances
upon the faces of words, which always
require thought and penetrating vision
to truly savour the poetic soup
that I am known to boil and serve.
Ah, and another thing:
My inkblade adores bleeding
those that encourage slavery.
May you be blessed in being taught
that words no matter how presented
and crafted- can never fully communicate
what a penmaster intends, since it is created
usually for more than one pair of eyes.
And many like you are comfortable
in the common act of assumption.
Which is why I am comfortably cantankerous-
a cherished tradition among many
who weild Titanium Pens.
Amen.
Up the ladder:
Babelfish Poetry (IV): Hablaré en pensamientos (Español)
Down the ladder:
The Widow Bird
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.25
Posted: October 4, 2003 2:55 AM PDT; Last modified: October 4, 2003 5:41 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.1490035 Overall Rank: 5243 Comments:
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SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.165.48
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4-Oct-03/2:56 AM
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oh my.. im really fired up.. notepad shall be sore before the day is done..
I once had a bike with a titanium frame. It hung itself. you mispelled a "truly" terrifficly, YES!
fixed. and, its a good thing that there are more than just my two eyes scanning those lines..
get me better glasses for christmas and kill the lenscrafter punk slowly would you?
Long debate.. and darky, heres some deleting!
im sure you can post the soon to be MIA comments for all to behold.
and what was the point in that? You've completely removed any trace of the rather enjoyable discussion about flinging a kidney to Sydney. And our amusing little debate about your "cuisine" illness has now been lost in the ether. Great censorship, I must say. I really wish nentwined would get rid of comment deletion once and for all. There should be a general consensus among the poemeranking community that when you put your work up for public display on a ranking website, the comments other people make are not your property.
Ah, you shouldnt sulk, because now you can talk the usual blab and have available proof dark. Censorship? Real censorship wouldnt include loose comments admitting my crimes. :) And, would you like me to make a post with the entire comment stream?
aye? if you are so sad to have lost it? I REALLY have it, along with the first comments that greeted me the first day i posted.. dreamersupreme is a different story- didnt put email comments on that penname.. but thats not important to the subject here since all the comments occured under an SD post. ---------------------------------------- You could do it provided the condoms didn't lose their elasticity, no matter how far back you pulled them. Having personally stretched every condom I've tried way beyond its threshold of elasticity, I know this last condition to be untenable. ---------------------------------------- look familiar? *chuckle*
Wouldn't you find it even remotely off-putting if the person you were talking to suddenly stopped, mid debate, and deleted your side of the argument replacing it with a collection of smug, one-sided retorts about how blah, blah "don't leave loose ends like cuisine" blah? It certainly doesn't say much for their integrity as a mature poete capable of having a two-sided discussion about their work without losing it.
Oh and one more thing: "Censorship? Real censorship wouldnt include loose comments admitting my crimes." That is complete bollocks. Think about it.
I did: most comment slayers leave no trace whatsoever.. actually, i think all that i can recall. they dont want to be known for it.
Oh, and would you like it if one accused you of false crimes? or made a large amount of convoluted reports of foulplay? Did you ever feel like making lies come true? Today I work miracles, and dont ask me how it feels- i dealt with museheart and other folks in different galaxies that laid waste to my comments. this was going to happen one point or another, and now i did it. I INTENTIONALY censored a targeted comment line. And i leave the proof of it- it doesnt look good for me: but as always, i couldnt give a shit really. but i have my points to hammer. And of maturity and sound conduct? you are the last fool able to mutter anything of it. Now take your smug demeanor and shove it. heh. i like kamikaze.
Have you committed "Real censorship"? The answer is "yes". Therefore your original remark was complete bollocks just as I said. Shall we move on?
The thing I find so extraordinary about you is that whenever I question one of your actions - such as deleting my comments or randomly inserting the word "cuisine" into your work - you instantly jump on the defensive accusing me of sulking or making up convoluted reports of foulplay or spouting hot air or being stubborn or whatever, and then, after a little thought, you say that actually the word "cuisine" shouldn't have been there afterall, that you are indeed guilty of censorship and that it doesn't really look good for you, that you've had your fair share of comment deletions and now it's your turn, etc. And when I ask you why you did these things the answer is: -shrug-, or "I don't give a shit what I do", or "It's the drugs, man". So in light of such excellent and well-thought-out motives, can you really blame me for questioning your actions? The answer is "no".
The comment debate is not what i was speaking of Darkie, and you know that. ;)
Its not my use of cooking terms.. perhaps you'd like to visit your recent suggestions? I like making scenes and frontpage headlines darkie, cmon now- this should have been obviouse for some time. But- you do too, in your own subtle way.. i could give a shit about cuisine vs culinary or the use of the almighty dictionary. I enjoy the act of arguing, etc. Anyway- I got other things to do, a room to clean and a house to make livable again, so toodles.
drivel
weak.
i expected more. snarl some more. ;P
and wearing ironed suits with orange W's nullify your
"certainly doesn't say much for their integrity as a mature poete" some melodramatic folks would compare it to a star of david- i call it my golden lightning, also: my wings. :)
oh yeah- sue me. hah.
one lil x button.. its like playstation "ya know"
bazooka'd city hall while nuking the white house coooool eh?
btw folks, its bad to have these loose ends like cuisine, because its a sign of some odd little blemish that will lead to some scandal. beware.
Oh, and folks, "i have just covered up the proof of my retardation" BUT- getting all comments via email means that.. i can really post it all.. anyone want me to do that? (copy pasting from IE is quite easy, i just need to get the order of the messages right.. ) 416 view(s)
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