regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jan-05/5:33 AM
You should have titled this something like "Melancholy on LSD."
Re: "I" became "We" by *.*ReAdY To SnAp.*.	26-Jan-05/5:39 AM
If this were posted as a pimple, I'd be inclined to say that this poem is "brilliant", and created by one who has the pen-stroke of a genius.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jan-05/5:51 AM
Well, that calls for a seven.
Re: Lonely People by april fool	26-Jan-05/5:56 AM
Schizo life gets old when your pals reflect the split persona which is you, yourself, twisted and torn in the delusion of "them". But anyway, you gave me a few giggles, so have a seven.
Re: Ode 2 2Pac by PodPoet	26-Jan-05/6:05 AM
Our troubles gone? what? eh? Hay, fate has a funny sense of humor, as for racism plugging ears, "Rapping the words we're afraid to hear", After 2pac went down, Eminem snatched the torch and blazed an inferno that leaves makavelli consumed, drowning in the ashes, his tombstone engraved with the title of "old skool."
Re: Birth by Caducus	26-Jan-05/6:13 AM
Left trembling my friend.. shrivelled from shivering. Ten. PS: Last stanza is sublime, I just love it. "pulled from the cunt of life..." Fucking brilliant.
Re: thoughts on a long lazy day by francis nor capule	26-Jan-05/6:18 AM
evanesced auspice. There goes a suggestion from my asshat sir.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jan-05/6:39 AM
I feel like you micro-sized my Goldmunds Slut Fiasco. I hate you, adore you, and forever strive to consume you in a blaze of stupidity.
Re: The Difference by thepinkbunnyofdoom	26-Jan-05/7:02 AM
Amen.
Re: Devil, Devil, Hear Me Pray by PsydewaysTears	30-Jan-05/4:41 AM
Not bad, not bad, but I have some edits to suggest: 1st Stanza-- Devil, Devil, hear me pray, listen close to what I say. 2nd Stanza-- I would pay you to tempt me with your clever little lies, offer me your cruel malice wrapped up in a cherry pie. 3rd Stanza-- Devil, Devil, hear me pray; keep my sobbing eyes at bay. 4rth Stanza-- I would beg you to smite me As only Lucifer himself could. I deserve to suffer much more Than merely being understood. 5th Stanza-- Devil, Devil, hear me pray; teach me the wisdom of your wicked way. 7th Stanza-- Devil, Devil, hear me pray; take me, take- take my spirit away: 8th Stanza-- If I can not make you do to me what you must, I'll offer my soul to you with a single direct thrust. Consider them if you feel so inclined. Blessed with seven.
Re: A love apple's just a tomato (edit of "Uprooting") by fevriere	31-Jan-05/6:05 PM
Sure is more creative and solid than the usual-- "I hate you, you bastard, stabbed me in the heart, I'm stronger, don't need you, you'll regret dumping or cheating on me, blarg, blarg, etc, etc." I almost gave up the hope that somebody would put some thought into an "uprooting" poem. Blessed with eight.
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Jan-05/6:25 PM
Cliche seems to be your defining characteristic. It's bad when you start off a poem by stating the obvious. Zero.
Re: My concept of existence by Prince of Void	31-Jan-05/6:31 PM
What is this amassed hubris of catch phrases and vague nonsense? An expression of chaos? Even anarchy has a hint of form, a subtle rational, a sense of direction. When will you grasp that concept?
Re: James The Dashing Pirate by thepinkbunnyofdoom	31-Jan-05/6:39 PM
Rated R for language and explicit content. An arrogant aside, beautifully stunning. & Your as large as life, written to be. I'd rewrite that to: Rated R for language and explicit content-- (or ;) arrogance aside, absolutely stunning. & You're larger than life, written to be. Beautifully stunning is just redundant, and it's always good to clarify the use of a contraction ole comrade. That said, have a hearty nine.
Re: Life by AmberDawn	1-Feb-05/4:48 PM
Ambitious, but ultimately found lacking. Take smaller bites, little dabs of mustard, and eventually the sandwhich becomes whole. (If that makes any sense... *shrug*) Blessed with three.
Re: a scene in american ghetto by cowmoo	8-Feb-05/12:27 AM
I'd call this a very rough draft, with a very disappointing ending. Time to edit boy. Six.
Re: Concerto Chaotic by thepinkbunnyofdoom	8-Feb-05/12:31 AM
Misspelled thighs. Bravo motherfucker.
Re: The Observer by Jeremi B. Handrinos	16-May-05/11:32 AM
Alice, there are many who await you in earnest in the depths of this chaotic rabbit hole. You need not a partner, all is good and safe... if thou art a madman ofcourse.
Re: Mother by Jeremi B. Handrinos	16-May-05/4:27 PM
It has been awhile since last I read your work or even checked the ranker, and it looks like your style has evolved/changed quite a bit.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-May-05/5:01 PM
You are a child, a sad, foolish one who seeketh another to appease the ego, a harlot that causes thee to forget thy shadow-- it is but short lived, and savagely ended, from which you shall despair again in darkness, in the absence of the light that must be born within. You'll most likely think, "What the fuck ever."; but then again, it's all humor and black pearls of charity to me.