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thoughts on a long lazy day (Free verse) by francis nor capule i fondly recall those conversations we had
every morning , the distance notwithstanding, and how i wished you there
at my side
then and there...
the way i'd wait for you to tell me that you'd be leaving soon,
so i could just get a glimpse of you, as you walk away.
how i would think of what you think , and what you want,
and what you will.
those would still be the best days that i ever had.
and it brings to my heart a soft warmth... just remembering.
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Posted: January 23, 2005 9:48 PM PST; Last modified: January 30, 2005 11:00 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 7895 Comments:
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SupremeDreamer @ 66.248.82.95
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26-Jan-05/6:18 AM
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evanesced auspice. There goes a suggestion from my asshat sir.
Damn.. these things are vague.. but gives you that warm toasted feeling like marshmallows left in the sun.. 10
purity often wins.
the leaving lines are too close together, I think. Maybe you were going for a repetition thing there, but I think it would work better if you changed one of the leavings to something else.
hey... that's great . let me see what i can do about the opine.
better.
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