Re: Crack baby by Caducus	3-Jul-05/8:03 PM
I really like how cold you make birth feel in this poem. a somewhat recycled feel. like a tired soul being reused to birth an inadequate baby. the images come in chilling shards. the ending was like poison, a gentle deadly surprise. i didn't expect the poem to touch on death in the end. thank you for sharing.
Re: Mother Earth by TLRufener	3-Jul-05/7:56 PM
generally, this is a wonderful write. wistful and rather fleeting. it could use more poignancy though. i had to read several times to feel it. perhaps its the structure.
Re: A Place by Celtic	3-Jul-05/7:53 PM
the first stanza builds up an expectation which the ending doesn't really satisfy. nonetheless i think it's a fairly good work in a nursery rhyme kind of way. thank you for sharing.
Re: glimpses by nentwined	23-Oct-03/1:03 AM
what rockmage said. heh. :)
Re: Painted Air by New Life Drug	7-Oct-03/6:50 PM
very visual
Re: Squeeze it out... by mrpresident	7-Oct-03/6:16 PM
hohohoh almost orgasmic! 7!
Re: silent struggle by princesszoe	7-Oct-03/6:08 PM
heartfelt. 8.
Re: Damage by Caducus	5-Aug-03/4:14 AM
man..this is excellent. so strong and skilfully crafted. thank you. 9
Re: my company by girlandwords	5-Aug-03/3:47 AM
wow.
Re: Palm Field Park by SupremeDreamer	5-Aug-03/3:45 AM
touching.
Re: Beauty within by geewhiz1962	29-Jul-03/6:14 PM
sounds like teen poetry. i hate teen poetry.
Re: An Enviable Task by cleverdevice	27-Jul-03/4:59 PM
wow, excellent. 9.
Re: Candles by goddessbyfire	26-Jul-03/9:38 PM
i can SEE this. 8.
Re: Two sides of Broken trust by DeadtotheWorld	26-Jul-03/9:37 PM
this sounds really sincere and deep.. 8.
Re: The Path Untrodden by Terence	26-Jul-03/9:23 PM
yes, that's the word. lyrical. excellent. 9.
Re: Not right now by thepinkbunnyofdoom	24-Jul-03/4:39 AM
for some reason, that amused me :) i like it!