| Re: Crack baby by Caducus |
3-Jul-05/8:03 PM |
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I really like how cold you make birth feel in this poem. a somewhat recycled feel. like a tired soul being reused to birth an inadequate baby. the images come in chilling shards. the ending was like poison, a gentle deadly surprise. i didn't expect the poem to touch on death in the end. thank you for sharing.
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| Re: Mother Earth by TLRufener |
3-Jul-05/7:56 PM |
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generally, this is a wonderful write. wistful and rather fleeting. it could use more poignancy though. i had to read several times to feel it. perhaps its the structure.
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| Re: A Place by Celtic |
3-Jul-05/7:53 PM |
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the first stanza builds up an expectation which the ending doesn't really satisfy. nonetheless i think it's a fairly good work in a nursery rhyme kind of way. thank you for sharing.
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| Re: glimpses by nentwined |
23-Oct-03/1:03 AM |
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what rockmage said. heh. :)
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| Re: Painted Air by New Life Drug |
7-Oct-03/6:50 PM |
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| Re: Squeeze it out... by mrpresident |
7-Oct-03/6:16 PM |
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hohohoh almost orgasmic! 7!
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| Re: silent struggle by princesszoe |
7-Oct-03/6:08 PM |
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| Re: Damage by Caducus |
5-Aug-03/4:14 AM |
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man..this is excellent. so strong and skilfully crafted. thank you. 9
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| Re: my company by girlandwords |
5-Aug-03/3:47 AM |
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| Re: Palm Field Park by SupremeDreamer |
5-Aug-03/3:45 AM |
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| Re: Beauty within by geewhiz1962 |
29-Jul-03/6:14 PM |
sounds like teen poetry. i hate teen poetry.
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| Re: An Enviable Task by cleverdevice |
27-Jul-03/4:59 PM |
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| Re: Candles by goddessbyfire |
26-Jul-03/9:38 PM |
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| Re: Two sides of Broken trust by DeadtotheWorld |
26-Jul-03/9:37 PM |
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this sounds really sincere and deep.. 8.
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| Re: The Path Untrodden by Terence |
26-Jul-03/9:23 PM |
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yes, that's the word. lyrical. excellent. 9.
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| Re: Not right now by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
24-Jul-03/4:39 AM |
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for some reason, that amused me :) i like it!
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