poemranker ::Beauty within by geewhiz1962

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Free verse № 58039

Beauty within

Member since 2003 · Posted 29 Jul 2003 · 3 comments

Piercing blue eyes, pearlie white teeth. God how I wonder, what lies beneath? Dressed to a tee, always in fashion. The wondrous looks, they tickle my passion. The upright posture, the walk of a queen. Let me look closer, what does it mean? Is the heart lovely? Is there beauty within?. The package looks great, where do I begin? Is she well rounded? She looks so great. Should I say hi or should I hesitate? I know a gal, whom I admire most. Her looks are fine, she does not boast. Beauty she has, it comes from within. Trading that for a trophy, would be such a sin.

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[2] Craychus 29-Jul-03/6:14 PM Reply
sounds like teen poetry. i hate teen poetry.
[n/a] geewhiz1962 › Craychus 30-Jul-03/3:59 AM Reply
Who cares!
[7] INTRANSIT 30-Jul-03/5:44 AM Reply
It may be pimply around the edges, it's almost spot on in rythm and has a mature message. there's potential here.