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Free verse № 59372

Palm Field Park

Member since 2003 · Posted 5 Aug 2003 · 5 comments

Laughter rolls off a child's tongue in the park of wind blown palms. It radiates into the air and travels to my ears. The sound sparks memories of my empty youth; where racking sobs and tears replaced the unrestrained expression of joy that this child enjoys. I follow the trail of this sonance to be welcomed with the sight of the toddler's mother embracing him in a wild spin that lifts his small body high into the sky. I smile at this scene, praying that the present path of their life never runs off track.

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5 comments

[7] Craychus 5-Aug-03/3:45 AM Reply
touching.
[7] richa 5-Aug-03/8:12 AM Reply
most of the first two verses are not needed. This works for me as the parable of a child alone.

And your 'empty youth' sounds a little adolescent indulgent
[9] Ataryu 5-Aug-03/3:28 PM Reply
:'(
[7] Shardik 5-Aug-03/10:06 PM Reply
Or back on.
[6] Jill Stockinger 1-Jan-21/6:39 PM Reply
Learned a new word. Sonance. Thanks! (sound)
A little cliche'd but sweet.