Re: a comment on Loosed by <~>	19-Oct-02/4:10 AM
she drank a false death, to escape the bounds of her name. when all went awry, then the dagger came...
Re: a comment on oedipus is raising a pint to me now by <~>	18-Oct-02/7:11 PM
well, it's supposed to make you feel a little sick when you read it. eww.
Re: a comment on oedipus is raising a pint to me now by <~>	18-Oct-02/7:07 PM
did not happen, will not happen. i raised a pint to oedipus when i wrote it, mrs.g.
Re: a comment on Loosed by <~>	18-Oct-02/4:14 PM
ah, brazen, there is nothing beautiful about it. don't lose yourself in a woman, find something there. and share. and never, ever fuck someone you love's sister. or even think about it. (assuming you are a male, or so oriented.)
Re: a comment on Loosed by <~>	18-Oct-02/4:09 PM
many times, when a piece of mine is unfinished, the title is uncapitalized. so, if you read one of mine and find it so, you will know it for what it is: swaddling.
Re: a comment on Loosed by <~>	18-Oct-02/4:04 PM
the question was added in the second writing. yes, it is a work in progress, and will no doubt undergo radical revision. i will take the question out, though. after my long drive home, i read it aloud and i do not like it, so, dahling p&k, out it goes. i am going to hear the blues tonight, and when i return, no doubt i will have more and more insight. cafe 9. i have told you of it before. it is a crossroads.
Re: a comment on Loosed by <~>	18-Oct-02/8:27 AM
juliet could have easily had him, were he not a montague. i could easily love him, had i not lost my heart to another capulet, who will not return it
Re: a comment on Loosed by <~>	18-Oct-02/8:03 AM
shit. sorry c. i deleted your comment when i meant to revise mine. will you repost?
Re: a comment on Bowed by <~>	18-Oct-02/7:53 AM
knicky and i play scrabble, and she introduced me to he. i have just posted 'loosed', a sequel to this poem.
Re: a comment on Bowed by <~>	18-Oct-02/7:37 AM
you say woof, i say weft. yes. warp. ain't been there yet. will go scribing later on though, thanks.
Re: purple and black gangstaz theme tune by rosiebailey	18-Oct-02/7:35 AM
eh.
Re: Libra by Rex Karrs	18-Oct-02/7:23 AM
happy birthday, rex
Re: casting couch by darby pyn	18-Oct-02/7:05 AM
i like all the images and the way you address the situation. but if it's a fast punk song, giving it a hammering meter. then it would strike down opposition.
Re: Stamp by worldsofwar	18-Oct-02/6:56 AM
why? why why why? this sucks.
Re: the girl what gave scott the look by UAFANTHORPEY	18-Oct-02/6:55 AM
she's givin more than the look. i love this. except for the 69 reference. that's not handles as well as the rest of it. show me you know how to handle it, ua
Re: Ode to Larkbeat Twoshoes by Nicholas Jones	18-Oct-02/6:47 AM
the first 7 lines are clumsier than the balance. it is a sparkling instant, and desrves to be captured so. please consider re-working. i would love to see this shine.
Re: a comment on The Devil Made Her Do It by Limness	17-Oct-02/11:12 AM
ironically, the limness poem right before this was regarding that. psychic indeed. what do you see in my future, o beaked one?
Re: a comment on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT	17-Oct-02/7:27 AM
actually, that's how i read it as well.
Re: On the Swings by Christof	17-Oct-02/7:15 AM
this sounds like great fun! who would you like to give a little shove to, christof?
Re: Reptiles & Dust - Part One by Wulf	16-Oct-02/9:07 AM
why 162 stanzas? not that the words are not beautiful, but there is hardly enough here to be cause for an epic length. it seems more well suited to be its own volume than to be presented thus, electronically and straining to the eyes. i must admit that the stanzas being numbered, and the length of it daunts me, especially without a rhythmic meter to pull me through it.