Bowed

Member since 2002 · Posted 15 Oct 2002 · 11 comments

Did I find a chink momentarily bared when I loosed that straight and simple missive? Why did I dare? I will no more hide my eyes, it said for me who could not bring my lips to form the words nor my form near yours for fear of being pierced Once taut then emptied of quiver like a feathered thought I flew to you, true and struck at the heart

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[9] god'swife 15-Oct-02/10:57 AM Reply

You are too much a good thing. You strike at my heart, and I am grateful for it.

[n/a] <~> › god'swife 15-Oct-02/11:00 AM Reply

i am humbled.

[9] INTRANSIT 15-Oct-02/11:51 AM Reply

Maybe some day I'll be able to graciously flow the pain of romance the way you two ladies do. Until then, I will be happy watching the pros.9

[7] horus8 15-Oct-02/12:56 PM Reply

i'm with him! but i'd rather be with you. hee hee. my hoof is blushing.

[10] Christof 18-Oct-02/7:23 AM Reply

The tensions behind this are so powerful. For those who cannot speak, the written word is such an erotic tool. This balances up fear and anticipation, secrecy and disclosure. Woof.

Did you get the link for Scriberazone?

[n/a] <~> › Christof 18-Oct-02/7:37 AM Reply

you say woof, i say weft. yes. warp. ain't been there yet. will go scribing later on though, thanks.

[10] Christof › <~> 18-Oct-02/7:41 AM Reply

I've just been checking out Rex Karrs, one of your friends I think? He's good. You've introduced a few good people here (Knickytoy I think is ace) - how do you know all these poets, whereas I know none? I must hang out in the wrong places.

[n/a] <~> › Christof 18-Oct-02/7:53 AM Reply

knicky and i play scrabble, and she introduced me to he.

i have just posted 'loosed', a sequel to this poem.

[5] blackball 25-Nov-02/12:24 AM Reply

hey...he's robin hood...cool

[9] Quarton 1-Dec-02/7:10 PM Reply

This is great. Well written and a strong ending. Cupid lives!!:)

[8] Nicholas Monson 3-Dec-02/1:17 PM Reply

Some lovely construction and rhythym.