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Bowed (Free verse) by <~> Did I find a chink momentarily bared
when I loosed that straight and simple missive?
Why did I dare?
I will no more hide my eyes, it said
for me who could not
bring my lips to form the words
nor my form near yours
for fear of being pierced
Once taut then emptied of quiver
like a feathered thought
I flew to you, true
and struck at the heart
Up the ladder:
Bowling For Turpentine
Down the ladder:
ODE TO NICHOLAS JONES III
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.5789475
Posted: October 15, 2002 10:52 AM PDT; Last modified: October 15, 2002 10:52 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.5040646 Overall Rank: 679 Comments:
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god'swife @ 209.179.212.10
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15-Oct-02/10:57 AM
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You are too much a good thing. You strike at my heart, and I am grateful for it.
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<~> @ 167.206.181.179
> god'swife
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15-Oct-02/11:00 AM
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i am humbled.
Maybe some day I'll be able to graciously flow the pain of romance the way you two ladies do. Until then, I will be happy watching the pros.9
i'm with him! but i'd rather be with you. hee hee. my hoof is blushing.
The tensions behind this are so powerful. For those who cannot speak, the written word is such an erotic tool. This balances up fear and anticipation, secrecy and disclosure. Woof.
Did you get the link for Scriberazone?
you say woof, i say weft. yes. warp. ain't been there yet. will go scribing later on though, thanks.
I've just been checking out Rex Karrs, one of your friends I think? He's good. You've introduced a few good people here (Knickytoy I think is ace) - how do you know all these poets, whereas I know none? I must hang out in the wrong places.
knicky and i play scrabble, and she introduced me to he.
i have just posted 'loosed', a sequel to this poem.
hey...he's robin hood...cool
This is great. Well written and a strong ending. Cupid lives!!:)
Some lovely construction and rhythym.
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