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The Devil Made Her Do It (Free verse) by Limness She opens the box
And draws out her cards
Smudges the surface,
Smoothes out the cloth
She shuffles and hums
And quiets the mind
Brings in the light
Closes the blinds
Pregnant with question
Making a mantra
Tapping the deck
She slaps out Arcana
Adjusts the Hanged Man
Across the Priestess
Above and Below,
Present and past
Her goal, her future,
Her self, her blocks
Answers form
In Coins and Cups
Now that she knows that
Confront him she must
The Tower will fall
But the Fool's in the past
When Judgement comes
Temperance answers
She looks at the spread,
Bared here in this cross
Inverts the last card
And laughs for her loss
Up the ladder:
Charlottesville
Down the ladder:
The Third Fall Of Jesus
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Posted: October 16, 2002 5:43 PM PDT; Last modified: October 16, 2002 5:43 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.318182 Overall Rank: 3506 Comments:
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16-Oct-02/6:44 PM
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I dunno, this speaks to me of a prostitutes sadness towards her predicament...? Well written, I think.
My limited knowledge of tarot doesn't help me here, but I think she's decided to cool off her relationship with some chap? what is the significance if inverting the last card? Pleasedo explain because I think it'll clear up the poem for me - it has your usual grace and swing.
the outcome: the Devil reversed: escape from a bad situation.
you see me, mr c.
I'm glad to see I sort of understood it while not understanding it. Means your message comes over loud and clear. Good stuff.
still, i am not happy with the flow of it. but it was a toss-off, and a decent one, so i'll think on it in public for a while. thanks for the compliments.
the chariot? then the star. some dogs bark at nothing..why'd you repost all of these?
i think you meant this comment for someone else, h. i wrote this poem last night.
It's good but I can see why you want to fix it up a bit. I'll print this and stare at it a while. There's nothing obvious.
not so much this, as the others. i'm aware that this is new. it just seems alot of folks were slate wiping these days and i just thought it was oddly coincidental. that's all.for some the devil means something mysteriously vague and bad?it's all about change though, upside down. rightside up is bound by routine unable to change. tied to your ways and past. that's what mr.chows fortune cookie told me yesterday when i went orange chicken crazy..
ironically, the limness poem right before this was regarding that. psychic indeed. what do you see in my future, o beaked one?
Nice flow to this and well written. Also, quite original.
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