Re: Jerk ?? Circle by horus8	16-Oct-02/8:50 AM
"Murderers still love In their blunted Lurching strokes" my favorite. try and explain it away. i'll love a murderer as well as the next man.
Re: Homemade Greetings by jessicazee	16-Oct-02/8:07 AM
swell. biting.
Re: a comment on more{Porn*Star}{Hai*kus} by horus8	15-Oct-02/12:24 PM
ugh. i hate that word! i'll get you some merlot instead.
Re: a comment on Bowed by <~>	15-Oct-02/11:00 AM
i am humbled.
Re: simple silence by daniella	15-Oct-02/7:07 AM
beautiful and spare.
Re: a comment on Kindling by <~>	14-Oct-02/5:17 PM
under the sycamore, as usual? you know i always bring the chemistry set, love. what'll it be tonight?
Re: realities <from above their brilliance is short-lived> by royalflesh	14-Oct-02/5:08 PM
mud has no place in my mind's eye for this unrhyme; and a mississippi sky drips right for the time, ages or aeons or eras, sublime-all those vowels long, longing sing singy-sounds.... sigh. if i looked at you with long puddle eyes that poured, would you throw me down, as a god? my eyes are grey; their color they will not divulge. wash away the mud and tell it again. the earth stains this tale of two, and more
Re: glory bar realities by royalflesh	14-Oct-02/4:47 PM
post more. pretty please.i need more.
Re: Shut Out by joho117	14-Oct-02/4:45 PM
"That I actually still loved you And found you so nice." this is unadulterated crap. p&k, where the hell are you? this one needs a good lambasting, and i am not up to it, in my weakened condition. bah, humbug.
Re: First date (for Larry, a lesbian vampire) by Bachus	14-Oct-02/4:43 PM
disappointing ending. the fore had such aplomb, and then, ssslurp--over. bah. try again h. you know better than to foist this off on me. z,
Re: Tuesday, again and again and... by <{Baba^Yaga}>	14-Oct-02/4:41 PM
no. but it makes for fine lyrics. rock on, h.
Re: Rummage Sales by jessicazee	14-Oct-02/4:40 PM
fuckin A. the game is indeed on, lassie
Re: Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	14-Oct-02/11:46 AM
'why the Browne Winds blew' or 'God goes not at all with wine!'...hard to say which i favor more. both are sheer revelation. bravo. encore.
Re: Sanity by Tascobar	14-Oct-02/9:56 AM
are there 12 of them, and does mr pitt make the occasional cameo?
Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	14-Oct-02/9:15 AM
he only just finished it. you are no baby, sir. not to put words in p&k's mouth, or sweetbred or anything else in his mouth, for that matter...
Re: Snow-White by vulcan	14-Oct-02/9:10 AM
i like what you are trying to say, but you are not communicating it effectively
Re: A poets call to arms by INTRANSIT	14-Oct-02/9:07 AM
an army of thinkers. easier said than done, but it is a good fight, and i am fighting it, as are you. you just can't let on that you're after their soul right away, or that you're speaking (poetry) (shhh!!!). people are scared of poetry because they think it is beyond them. pshaw!
Re: Snow-White by vulcan	14-Oct-02/9:04 AM
and, calling it 'snow-white' conjurs disney for me. now i am not everyman, but i think you might consider the efeect the title has on the piece overall.
Re: a comment on Snow-White by vulcan	14-Oct-02/9:03 AM
jesus, vulcan, it just doesn't work like that. it's too archaic sounding, and doesn't come off that way at all. sorry.
Re: a comment on Snow-White by vulcan	14-Oct-02/8:54 AM
e) maybe if vulcan decides if the snow has made the protagonist into a snow man, or if some one has meade a snowman for the amusement of the protagonist, and conveys that more clearly; maybe if vulcan can explain how the balls of snow are balful; maybe if vulcan can explain how said protagonist is still yet moving through a storm (which generally requires a struggle) 'as Death' implies the protagonist not being dead; maybe vulcan mean he/she is doomed to walk in the snowstorm forever, and thus the use of 'sole'? have i hit on any of your main points, and if so, COULD YOU PLEASE pare the damn thing down and try NOT to be obscure? one may write worlds that taste diaphanous without occluding the vision.