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A poets call to arms (Free verse) by INTRANSIT Poets! Arise!
Take up sword and shield
and address those closest you.
Go into the dead!
Shake them awake and
make them ask "why".
Stab at their funny bone!
Humor them and tickle
their feet and tongue.
Knock them asunder!
Kick their shins and heads
and roll them in verbage.
Cut them in half!
Grab their hearts in one
hand, stomachs in t'other
and show them themselves.
Once you have done this,
tend to them and nurture
them and create an army.....
Up the ladder:
For Benjamin
Down the ladder:
Fake Happiness
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.3333335
Posted: October 13, 2002 6:10 PM PDT; Last modified: October 13, 2002 6:10 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.243686 Overall Rank: 4019 Comments:
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poetandknowit @ 65.101.212.11
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13-Oct-02/9:46 PM
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Goof poem.
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INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.139
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14-Oct-02/6:05 AM
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Mr P&K,thank you for your comment, please expound. In ref. to our previous conversation, it appears I have made many foolish assumptions.I welcome comments but have a little trouble differentiating between comments and playful jousting. I also started to take this site and my poetry a little too seriously. I'll try to loosen up in the future, thanks again.
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INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.139
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14-Oct-02/6:36 AM
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Also P&K, I'm not the bumdoctor, and I'm not frass but it's okay you thought that. I assumed you were a Mr. oTEPdrug at one point but zzinnia quickly corrected me on that. She's a nice lady and I've ignored most of her comments on my work. For this I DAMN MYSELF!
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<~> @ 167.206.181.179
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14-Oct-02/7:19 AM
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you only think i'm nice because you have ignored my comments.
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INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.139
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14-Oct-02/8:59 AM
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You want I should think you are mean? No way. Not doin' it. Ithink you ARE a nice person, and you save the claws for applicable applications. Your comments I have recieved seem knowledgeable and gentle. However, your underlying "dirtiness" amuses me.
I posted what i thought was a funny and well written commit, but then I submitted it under Horus8. I deleted the comment and now I can't come up with anything clever. I feel bad. I like being funny. I don't want a dead army. I don't understand your metaphor. Tickling the dead sounds gross. I don't want to do it.
you did what? Horus8 and then...huh? Just say it is a goof poem.
Oh dear God. What have we done?
Dark Angel, I thought your "bumdoctor" haiku was a stab at my generous scoring of other peoples poems. I see now that to be a bad assumtion. Like I said to Mr. P&K, I started to take things a little too seriously here. I welcome your comments, I'll try to lighten up. Thanks, could you comment on my "frozen beauty" haiku, I'm seriously interested in getting it right.
God's wife, This wasn't meant to be a goof poem as Mr P&K said. In fact this is one of my personal favorites. This poem is a metaphor for finding people who have little or no spark in their lives. We poets have a way of reaching people with a few words and I think our talents have gobs-o-merit in the real world.
This is supportive of our craft, sword and shield=pen and pad. We can make people feel pain, pleasure, lonely , happy and we can celebrate things as simple as coffee. Don't worry about being funny, ask P&K and Dark Angel, they'll tell you I'm not ready for playful jousting yet. Thanks, If I can improve on this piece, let me know.
let's see, I read this last night while at Horus8's house. I wasn't too impressed. Horus8 seemed to really get it and he loved "roll them in verbage". This poem is goofy to a certain extent. I realize when you say the dead you don't mean the dead, dead, but I can't help picturing corpse in various states of decomposition and me trying to resurrect them. Also the image of an army just feels anti-poet. Poets do not lead armies, as far as I know, can anyone tell me if a poet has ever lead an army? Does Lincoln count
We all know that you and the rascal horus8 are one and the same by now. Also, what about Poete Q. McGeneral?
Sorry no. He's a intimate friend, family really. He's my brother.
I believe GANDHI was to a degree, a poet. He led an army of people to fight without physical violence. I was going for "fun' not goofy. Could you recommend some reading that may help me improve my skills?
an army of thinkers. easier said than done, but it is a good fight, and i am fighting it, as are you. you just can't let on that you're after their soul right away, or that you're speaking (poetry) (shhh!!!). people are scared of poetry because they think it is beyond them. pshaw!
My dittos exactly.
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