| Re: crime scene (not for the weak!) by t_t_redhot |
4-Nov-02/7:36 AM |
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why put the 'not for the weak' disclaimer there if you are not going to fulfill it? there is nothing shocking here.
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| Re: cool hand luke by royalflesh |
4-Nov-02/7:27 AM |
my favorite line:
"burned pink candles to pretend they were your body."
so sensual, but needs tightening.
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| Re: ITS SO HARD by adrenalize |
4-Nov-02/7:06 AM |
fix the typos. we all know it is hard to let someone go. show us why.
there are very strong emotions trying to come through. give them room.
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| Re: The rendition (once bad movie night) by ~incarnate~ |
4-Nov-02/7:03 AM |
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who stood in effigy for him? why not do more with this? it's amusing...
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| Re: a comment on morning by kiki |
31-Oct-02/8:55 PM |
in my dictionary, "Basel" is a city, and "basal" is what you want.
but you folks in massachusetts have a whole nother way od doing things now don't you?
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| Re: a comment on Her Name Is Stella by Tascobar |
30-Oct-02/11:29 AM |
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stay out of my pub, damn you!!!
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| Re: a comment on In the Quiet of the Night a Tree Gently Shakes by Nicholas Jones |
30-Oct-02/7:59 AM |
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oops--typo. fingers not awake yet. no, i love it as it is.
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| Re: In the Quiet of the Night a Tree Gently Shakes by Nicholas Jones |
30-Oct-02/7:50 AM |
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'sleeps slips far'--tasty!
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| Re: Her Name Is Stella by Tascobar |
30-Oct-02/7:42 AM |
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why must she cost so damn much?
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| Re: a comment on Morning Glory by waltfreakinwhitman |
30-Oct-02/7:38 AM |
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i gave it a low vote, but only so it could rise to the top of the wurst list. i think it's hysterical.
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| Re: My Feet by smallsun |
30-Oct-02/7:07 AM |
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where can i get a pair of protective feet like that, and why didn't you lend them to your uncle?
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| Re: Jackanapes and smoke buttons by Bachus |
30-Oct-02/7:05 AM |
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you were cleary not a good fit, jack. this is a painful read; you are getting closer. put down that kale gun, wouldja? the thing makes me nervous. here, have a canape, i mean, 10.
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| Re: i'm the jesse james of the seven-eleven chain by Bachus |
30-Oct-02/7:02 AM |
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| Re: Another Tragic Love Poem by greym0on |
30-Oct-02/6:53 AM |
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whatever did you so foolishly do? well, it does not matter. you have ripped a new tear in my heavily-scarred heart. curse you.
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| Re: a comment on Selfish by darby pyn |
29-Oct-02/6:43 PM |
glad i could help. i think it's tenser, tighter now, and that definitely works here.
question: what's up with the shallow grave? just being a drama king/queen?
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| Re: a comment on boy girl by little_angel_maria |
29-Oct-02/1:42 PM |
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i think he fired him this time for bbq-ing HIS nuts (and eating them in the pantry)
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| Re: a comment on Faith by INTRANSIT |
29-Oct-02/1:03 PM |
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how about a laphroaig, neat?
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| Re: a comment on In the Valley of Two-Dollar Pints of Red Hook IPA by <~> |
29-Oct-02/1:01 PM |
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slumming, darling. that's what it's all about in the run down mill towns of the housatinic river valley.
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| Re: Selfish by darby pyn |
29-Oct-02/12:51 PM |
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also, switch the order of the first 2 lines. knuckles will be white before the crash, laddie.
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| Re: a comment on Faith by INTRANSIT |
29-Oct-02/12:47 PM |
because that's how faith operates. no, strike that, make it 'that's how organized religion operates.' there. that's the frighteneing part. trying to surmount all that has power, so that it can control the faithful.
strive to write pieces that make people uncomfortable. "like" is immaterial. make them think instead. in mine, people like them because i seduce with sooth. but there are barbs aplenty in this thick skin, and if you touch, if you stray, you will find them.
showing the ugly side at the same time as the pretty side is tricky stuff, and you did it well. so, why apologize?
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