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morning (Free verse) by kiki
Everyday I wake to the basel movements of somebody's brother above my face. A single bone locked in the awkward circles of morning haze. Then, crawling out from under you, I recollect myself.

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Posted: October 29, 2002 8:40 PM PST; Last modified: October 29, 2002 8:40 PM PST
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[3] Tintagiles @ 142.166.234.73 | 29-Oct-02/9:05 PM | Reply
'Basel movements'?
[n/a] kiki @ 24.61.133.29 > Tintagiles | 30-Oct-02/4:19 PM | Reply
What is your question. Look basel up in the dictionary.
[3] Tintagiles @ 142.166.239.207 > kiki | 30-Oct-02/7:46 PM | Reply
'Basel: German name for Basle. Basle: a commercial and industrial city on the Rhine in NW Switzerland; pop. 171,000 (1991). French name Bale, German name Basel.' I fail to see how a city can move in someone's brother. Unless you're misspelling 'basil', which makes just as much sense. Or do you mean bowel?
[n/a] kiki @ 140.232.133.253 > Tintagiles | 31-Oct-02/2:18 PM | Reply
Maybe you have a limited dictionary. Basel (correct spelling) is another word for animal (adj), instinctual.
[n/a] <~> @ 67.84.171.10 > kiki | 31-Oct-02/8:55 PM | Reply
in my dictionary, "Basel" is a city, and "basal" is what you want.
but you folks in massachusetts have a whole nother way od doing things now don't you?
[3] Tintagiles @ 142.166.233.80 > <~> | 31-Oct-02/9:36 PM | Reply
'Basal' Well, in my dictionary, basal means 'forming or belonging to a bottom layer or base.' What's that got to do with animal instincts? What strange and bizarre dictionnaries are you characters using? (New Oxford 1998 here)
[n/a] ==Doylum @ 213.1.165.57 > Tintagiles | 1-Nov-02/6:57 AM | Reply
Fecwitadge isn't in my dictonary. I like to use it to describe others. Am i wrong to do so?
[n/a] UnityMitford @ 167.206.181.179 > ==Doylum | 14-Nov-02/7:45 AM | Reply
this is all fascinating.
[1] god'swife @ 209.179.134.28 | 29-Oct-02/11:35 PM | Reply
"Somebody's brother"?
[n/a] kiki @ 24.61.133.29 > god'swife | 30-Oct-02/4:20 PM | Reply
What are you asking me?
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