Re: Cover song by bondjedi	27-Sep-02/7:46 AM
you just can't stop yourself, can you?
Re: Hunter's Moon by Rex Karrs	27-Sep-02/7:17 PM
bravo rex. so nice to see you here. glad you could make it. welcome to my world. nice entrance. etc.
Re: esopus creek by unknown	27-Sep-02/7:31 PM
damn wriggling winker got away again, didn't he? the wee bastard!
Re: Witch to Wicca by Lenore	27-Sep-02/7:55 PM
lenore, i like this, but i feel like you have mixed strong metaophor in with some much weaker passages. i would like to see it hones and stronger, more like an incantation: direct and powerful, as it could well be.
Re: beauty of senses by apples_tim	27-Sep-02/7:58 PM
i'm wondering why one would write yet another sunset poem, without a very specific something to say? i almost feel like you are asking us to live this moment for you. you lived it--you tell us what irt was like, okay?
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Sep-02/8:01 PM
i think you're killing us with the 'm' word. it throws the poem off for me. wouldn't 'bleeding' work as well? did you use 'menstruating' for technical correctness, or for shock? i have always found it to be an ugly, uncomfortable word, and i am very comfortable with all aspects of woman-ness. just my .02
Re: Hunter's Moon by Rex Karrs	27-Sep-02/8:53 PM
by the way, this is quite beautiful.
Re: Char by Amelia	27-Sep-02/10:23 PM
amalea, please understand that i do not mean this to be mean, but you should not use words that you don't understand. you have a LOT to say. you are very fiery in your rebuttals, and part of the reason you are teased/drawn out/whatever is that you do fight back. why not write in your own words? there is much beauty to be had in everyday things, and you are young and have a fresh and optimistics eyes. write about the boys who vie for you. they entertain and flatter you. but please, don't try to write to impress. write to communicate. you are good at it, but in adopting these style which do not fit you, you do yourself a disservice. peace. z
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Sep-02/11:26 PM
it dropped the 's' at the end again, mrs.g. throw a couple of line endings on, for good measure,that might stop it.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Sep-02/11:40 PM
minus one for the m-word, my own personal quirk
Re: Bobbing for Apples by Rex Karrs	30-Sep-02/9:33 AM
more's the pity--he'll be having his eye on another prize, won't he?
regarding some deleted poem...	30-Sep-02/9:36 AM
puctuate more judiciously,please. possibility is what keeps the artist at bay. and fear of the sheer enormity of it, sometimes. other times, the back is painted as well as the front, sirrah.
Re: the room's a'spinnin' by nentwined	30-Sep-02/12:12 PM
i want more impact on line 3, pretty please.
Re: Can't See by ThoughtfulSoul	30-Sep-02/12:15 PM
try banging your head against a wall. then you can see colors, too, and not just black.
regarding some deleted poem...	30-Sep-02/1:08 PM
wow, this is even worse than abigail's stuff.
Re: Sight by monotype	30-Sep-02/3:38 PM
welcome, monotype. don't need the title twice, otherwise i can find no fault with this poem. it blacks me blue, too.
Re: always the end to this good night by nentwined	30-Sep-02/3:39 PM
weaves and bobs aprropriately.
Re: Howl For Clarity (for Jeff Buckley) by Bachus	30-Sep-02/3:41 PM
just get a little bottle, and you'll be okay
Re: Howl For Clarity (for Jeff Buckley) by Bachus	30-Sep-02/3:54 PM
what, you don't call, you don't write--how was the show? all right?
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Oct-02/3:06 PM
i cannot comment on this now. but, i will.