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Sight (Free verse) by monotype
Sight Blacken me away gray scale from top to bottom. Ocean me in dust from far far away. Black scrape on my skin, tear charcoal dreams away and boots kick harder when blackened at night. Nothing seen but smoky black. Electricity moving on to my dreary days shadow on, shadow to, rub more on for the effect. Smudge and re-smudge, make me black and lesser blue.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.125
Weighted score: 5.0336175
Overall Rank: 7225
Posted: September 30, 2002 10:47 AM PDT; Last modified: September 30, 2002 10:47 AM PDT
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[9] nentwined @ 192.168.0.69 | 30-Sep-02/2:26 PM | Reply
beautiful.
[10] <~> @ 67.84.171.10 | 30-Sep-02/3:38 PM | Reply
welcome, monotype. don't need the title twice, otherwise i can find no fault with this poem. it blacks me blue, too.
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