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Bobbing for Apples (Free verse) by Rex Karrs
In masquerade, In character, They gather near the cider, Masks straining to conceal What the costumes work to reveal: Tomboys transformed into princesses and angels The chaste darkened into witches Bookworms stand aloof; Makeshift capes flapping over tights and boots Honor students sprout horns, tails and pitchforks Buccaneers and Gypsies throng among the gourds. In his small town, Charring the fields now fallow, Harvest bonfires sing of the bounty: This winter will know no hunger. Standing silent, under the brim of her witches' hat, She smiles at him. Amidst the music and flickering shadows, She is all he sees. Smiling back, He plunges his face Forward into the wet and sweet unknown And bites Into the tender fruit That is His prize.


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Arithmetic Mean: 5.3333335
Weighted score: 5.1666665
Overall Rank: 5066
Posted: September 28, 2002 7:56 AM PDT; Last modified: September 28, 2002 7:56 AM PDT
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[8] god'swife @ 209.179.134.150 | 28-Sep-02/9:20 AM | Reply
Not as good as your 1st one, but still excellent. Fallow is a favorite word. Welcome.
[n/a] Rex Karrs @ 152.163.189.171 > god'swife | 5-Oct-02/12:23 PM | Reply
Thanks for the encouragement. I must say, this one was harder to write - I just don't do as well with the "happier" ones. Its harder to stay in the spirit.
[7] knickytoy @ 24.45.19.89 | 30-Sep-02/9:29 AM | Reply
Very nice. What will you be for Halloween?

[7] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 30-Sep-02/9:33 AM | Reply
more's the pity--he'll be having his eye on another prize, won't he?
[9] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 18-Oct-02/7:37 AM | Reply
Will he be biting into her? An unexpectedly visceral undertone, which I like. I also like the details about the bookworms and the honour students.
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