Re: Theoretical Islamic Math by Bachus	2-Oct-02/3:07 PM
you, sirrah, are neither a gentleman nor a scholar, and that's exactly why i want you.
Re: Thanksgiving Dream Sequence by Venus	2-Oct-02/11:55 PM
fucking perfect, between love and hate; between holidays; betwwen adolescenece and despair. fucking perfect.
Re: Possibilities by Nicholas Jones	4-Oct-02/7:13 AM
in your bow? or in your quiver? otherwise very nice. but that bit threw me.
Re: Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof	4-Oct-02/8:16 PM
methinks the flaw makes the man. well done, christof! ah, the things one misses when one goes away for a spell
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-02/8:20 PM
i sure as hell wouldn't try and stop you. but wouldn't you rather picnic on the grss with p&k?
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-02/8:32 PM
this one rips my heart out mrs.g. i am glad, from reading the comments, that thr rubble has become walls. i hope they're painted in joyful colors now, even if they do need washing now and again, as shelters often do.
Re: Life of a Cubicle Dweller by loneshadow29	4-Oct-02/8:43 PM
okay, i agree with mrs.g in that you are off to a good start, but i think you should incorporate her suggestions and pare it down rather than flesh it out. you tend to use a lot of words, loneshadow, and you don't need to. "Wishing I could be among the geese" says it all. there are at least 3 other lines tacked on around this one which are completely unnecessary--this one says it all. learn to cut away. this is a beautiful line. cut this poem down by half, made up of lines like this, and you will have a gem.
Re: whilst the bells ring by richa	4-Oct-02/8:49 PM
this is the best i have read of yours. i liked it very much. great, sharp rhythm, macbre imagery, mood, tone... bravo.
Re: Haiku for Mum by waltfreakinwhitman	4-Oct-02/8:50 PM
you dawg. you always crck me right the fuck up. nice job.
Re: The Cross Foxes by Gwyrfab	4-Oct-02/9:13 PM
well done!
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-02/9:44 PM
well-hung.
Re: A Gift of Beauty... by loneshadow29	5-Oct-02/4:46 PM
hey loneshadow--this has promise. i suggest making the language more languid. it reads stacato, and if you are longing for her, i'd think the words would be more sultry, more mellifluous, more dreamy. good effort, though. z
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Oct-02/6:56 PM
don't u meen 'wubb'?
Re: The big O by flatliner	5-Oct-02/10:49 PM
oh. i thought you were talking about a different big o.
Re: Sympathy for a Pig by phbiscuit	5-Oct-02/10:50 PM
i couldn't.
Re: Bowing at the alter ego by flatliner	5-Oct-02/11:16 PM
don't do it johnnie. i may be a zzinnia, but who amongst you can vouchsafe my beauty, or lack thereof? and therefore, how can you compare her to me, or mrs.g, or razor? well, i guess you can since all's fair in love and poetry... except for you, h, you tease. the mp3's don't work, yeh wee bastard!
Re: From a letter (never sent) by UnityMitford	7-Oct-02/6:55 AM
i love it when you get rough, unity.
Re: America by little_angel_maria	7-Oct-02/7:37 AM
you should talk to doug soderstrom. he'd tell you why.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Oct-02/8:18 AM
i'm having a time making it feel like poetry in my mind, but i find the idea most entertaining.
Re: The day I told her by dalva	7-Oct-02/8:20 AM
at least you had the balls to tell her.