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Char (Other) by Amelia
Strengthened are words Like elevating hurricanes, Henceforth is sought The quiet arena, where nature collides On a seething sea. Tired shadows on a cold blue iceberg Shadows dwindling shriveled. Tar boils, Wood burns, Crackle, sizzle, kindle, and rise Arise, arise shadows the sun draws near Like the sudden race of poison through veins Stretching onward tyrant claws. Gnawing, gnawing... Tar boils, wood burns, and fires red. Smothered iceberg reaching fire, Smothered fire recoiling in rage, Seared iceberg, boiling waters, Elements hiss, elements fight, Equal opponents, equal casualty. Compromise results in demise. Shadows eternal, laugh in glee. Sun envelopes, sun smiles. White rash on black ash. Elements now in char find rebirth.

Down the ladder: i'm bad at waiting

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.64
Weighted score: 5.6357164
Overall Rank: 2174
Posted: September 27, 2002 1:29 PM PDT; Last modified: September 27, 2002 1:29 PM PDT
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Comments:
[9] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.107 | 27-Sep-02/6:13 PM | Reply
Really neat idea!!!!! Makes my LONLY look like fecal matter.(which it is)
[n/a] Amelia @ 152.163.189.171 > INTRANSIT | 28-Sep-02/9:14 AM | Reply
Thank you so much, I'm glad you like it, by the way, lonely is NOT fecal matter.
[n/a] Amelia @ 198.146.137.204 > INTRANSIT | 9-Oct-02/7:26 PM | Reply
Once again thank you for actually liking this poem. Bye.
[n/a] Amelia @ 198.146.137.204 > INTRANSIT | 9-Oct-02/7:29 PM | Reply
Thanks for telling me I'm adorable. I'm going into hibernation.
[n/a] Amelia @ 198.146.143.114 > Amelia | 17-Oct-02/1:29 PM | Reply
Bye Intransit, vulcan and living canvass. This time it's for good.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.77 > Amelia | 17-Oct-02/4:22 PM | Reply
Amalea May Juniper Berry! GET YOUR FANNY BACK IN HERE RIGHT THIS MOMENT YOUNG LADY! WE'RE NOT DONE WITH YOU YET!>O
[10] ~incarnate~ @ 198.146.143.19 > INTRANSIT | 23-Oct-02/5:59 PM | Reply
Wow! her poems quite nice. has a tinge of goth to it though and unexpected alliteration. fave line:white rash on black ash
[n/a] <~> @ 67.84.171.10 | 27-Sep-02/10:23 PM | Reply
amalea, please understand that i do not mean this to be mean, but you should not use words that you don't understand. you have a LOT to say. you are very fiery in your rebuttals, and part of the reason you are teased/drawn out/whatever is that you do fight back. why not write in your own words? there is much beauty to be had in everyday things, and you are young and have a fresh and optimistics eyes. write about the boys who vie for you. they entertain and flatter you. but please, don't try to write to impress. write to communicate. you are good at it, but in adopting these style which do not fit you, you do yourself a disservice. peace. z
[n/a] Amelia @ 152.163.189.171 > <~> | 28-Sep-02/8:59 AM | Reply
what words do I not understand? you are always mean.
[n/a] Amelia @ 198.146.137.204 > <~> | 9-Oct-02/7:24 PM | Reply
Vie for ME? L.O.L. Vie for ME.
[10] vulcan @ 80.242.3.79 | 28-Sep-02/7:37 AM | Reply
Why Amaelea!If you have tons of poems like this get them published!9/10
[n/a] Amelia @ 152.163.189.171 > vulcan | 28-Sep-02/9:15 AM | Reply
THANK YOU THANK YOU! CAN YOU SEE MY HEAD SWELL?
[n/a] Amelia @ 198.146.137.204 > vulcan | 9-Oct-02/7:28 PM | Reply
Hey Hephaestus(did I spell that right? It is the Greek synonym for the god Vulcan isn't it?) anyways, thanks for actually enjoying some of my poems, it's relaxing to hear good comments. Have a good time on this website, Bye.
[10] vulcan @ 80.242.3.79 | 28-Sep-02/7:38 AM | Reply
Sorry for the misspelling!Amalea!
[n/a] Amelia @ 152.163.189.171 > vulcan | 28-Sep-02/9:15 AM | Reply
When you gave me a 9/10, there's no problem. :-)
[9] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.237 | 28-Sep-02/10:32 AM | Reply
Even better the second time around.
[n/a] Amelia @ 198.146.142.98 > INTRANSIT | 30-Sep-02/12:25 PM | Reply
Thank you so much. :D
[3] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 8-Apr-03/1:09 AM | Reply
meh.
[n/a] Amelia @ 198.146.139.187 > Bill Z Bub | 14-Apr-03/7:02 PM | Reply
Huh?
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