Re: James The Dashing Pirate by thepinkbunnyofdoom	31-Mar-05/3:14 AM
Name me one person called Jason who is not a collossal cockwound.
Re: Standing by the Sea by thepinkbunnyofdoom	31-Mar-05/3:16 AM
You nonce.
Re: Moments (or) Suicide by Dovina	6-Apr-05/1:06 AM
The once warming, nay, comforting shroud of guff that surrounded your work, like a brown halo, has been penetrated by a sharp incision of failure hence the above poem receives a fitting vote of -4- :{
Re: I still love you by Prince of Void	6-Apr-05/1:07 AM
This poem or (other) is extremely rubbish.
Re: Homecoming by Dovina	13-Apr-05/5:13 AM
Congratulations.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Apr-05/5:20 AM
I love the way you have included the word very on the last line of the first verse to really lose what ever momentum of rhythm you generated. The second verse could easliy have been written by an 11 year old girl. The third verse benefits from having to really think whether the words can rhyme and maintain any semblence of rhythm. The sentiment contained is absolutely awful. Fourth: rhyming skills of a paraplegic. Fifth: written in the style that yoda speaks to young skywalker it is. In general - if I were your nana I would have shaken you to death as an infant.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Apr-05/5:34 AM
First verse, first line two uses of the word me really helps distinguish your work as that of a disabled. Guessing that in the second verse the word should be "your days here are long" even so that would be bile. Third verse, last line, for someone you love so much you are being very forceful in telling her never to question. However as this device has been used to expedite another terribly childish rhyme you are excused. Where to start on the fourth? well probably best to ask you to read it back and see how extremely poorly it conveys anything other than you are mentally crippled. Fifth - although rhyme is not essential or even necessary for poetry, it is important to be consistant if you are seeking an AABB rhyming structure. Diva and Mamosita rhyme as easliy as wheeledchair and food pipe. In general: why do you continue to write poems?
Re: Trying to get signed? by Damien	14-Apr-05/5:04 AM
Clever rhyme stategy. I don't want to be identified with zodiac's rude ranting all over you last poem but this poem may read better if there was a concession to grammar? anyway I think as it stands it's worth an eight of anybody's votes.
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Apr-05/2:04 AM
Ace - really glad your back ranking.
Re: 15 Minute poem by Damien	15-Apr-05/6:18 AM
Excellent retort. Your open expressions really come through without the use of grammar - It has certainly altered the way I view poetry. -9-
Re: A greater purpose? by Damien	25-Apr-05/6:15 AM
Awesome.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Apr-05/8:33 AM
Huge.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Apr-05/8:33 AM
Huge.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Apr-05/8:33 AM
Huge.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Apr-05/8:33 AM
Huge.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Apr-05/8:33 AM
Huge.
Re: PLEASE VOTE FOR MELANIE by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	3-May-05/2:29 PM
Vote for blonde, bubbly right winger? Or a fat lesbian minger? It's Mel for me, For she's the Tory, To make Peter Snow a swinger. Now that fat truck of a mess from labour! Why, only a body transplant could save her, The size of her belly, And her cunt's like a welly, Filled with communist jelly. The lib dem is as plain as a door, Without paint or other decor, Tax and spend is the vow, Of this skinny frau, She is easy to abhor.
Re: Mid Years by Dovina	11-May-05/4:05 AM
This is a very good piece. However I am concerned about your fascination with middle age, are you trying to make yourself feel happier about the onset of drooping and the ceasing of your monthlies?
Re: On the Bank of Lake Michigan by jessicazee	16-May-05/7:42 AM
Disappointing.
Re: I want to know what a lifes like.... by Damien	16-May-05/7:45 AM
Good - not sure about the use of a / in the poem it leads to a question without the tell tale sign of a ? to signify such. However it still throughs some awesome shapes.