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I want to know what a lifes like.... (Free verse) by Damien
I want to know what a life’s like Where I’ve got memories to the left and love to the right Where I can walk forward barefooted and not be scared Or walk backwards blindly still knowing what’s there Where trying to kill myself is not a monthly bump Like jumping off a bridge hitting the bottom before I jump Or doing something right being nothing but a crime In my room on my own, the wire might not snap next time So I dream of a life where everybody smiles There is no such thing as inner pain or ‘trials’ Where I can fly without needing physical things As my mind does the work for the illusions it brings Where fortune and love are a monthly bump Like jumping off a bridge only getting a lump Or doing something right as its always the time With the only way to preach is to speak through a rhyme So when/ if I get there I will inform the earth That anyone can do anything after birth When I tell you what has happened to me Will you then please leave me alone cant you see? That I can’t handle this mere fame for fee Because when I get there if nobody has a smile I don’t care; it’s been worth my while

Up the ladder: Veins of spilt wine.
Down the ladder: old friends

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6666665
Weighted score: 5.0794687
Overall Rank: 6479
Posted: May 3, 2005 2:29 PM PDT; Last modified: May 16, 2005 6:23 AM PDT
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[9] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 | 16-May-05/7:45 AM | Reply
Good - not sure about the use of a / in the poem it leads to a question without the tell tale sign of a ? to signify such. However it still throughs some awesome shapes.
[8] Dovina @ 69.175.32.185 | 16-May-05/12:54 PM | Reply
This looks like a response to someone who said, "Get a life." Maybe you should change the title to that.
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