poemranker ::Moving On by MacFrantic

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Free verse № 148423

Moving On

Member since 2003 · Posted 27 Dec 2006 · 2 comments

Amen for the losses, and again for the gains. I'm not sure we're ready for fortune and fame. But once in awhile we'll see ourselves blessed and even more so we'll be put to the test. So I'm asking you now In a moment of clarity just what are the terms for a taste of your charity? I'm constantly spinning in a circular motion. So you play me like a top. Can't get enough of your potion. Sometimes I say "stop," like I've finally had it, but you drive me around like I'm an automatic. There are memories here to make a small house a home. I can see what you want and it's a home of your own. Are you afraid to be happy? What's on your agenda? Can you compromise with me, or are you broke down and fed up? I'd like to help you cope I really would, I swear. You've always had me guessing about what is and isn't fair. So every time we pass I'll just nod and keep walking, because I can't hear your words when your actions are talking.

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[8] Dovina 28-Dec-06/3:07 PM Reply
The rhythm and rhyme are so good that the lapses glare.
[9] deleted user 4-Jan-07/3:59 AM Reply
Dovina is right, the rhythm and rhyme are great--nice work.