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Standing by the Sea (Other) by thepinkbunnyofdoom A man sits like as though he were stone
Waiting for a sign to move forward from this cliff
Once a week he abandons his cliffside by the sea to rest and eat
He has done so for almost a year now
Told by his elders to that he must wait to find a sign
He has seen many things but apon thought none were for him
Many ships have past by as well as beast
He has had heat visions of the Budda and Dragons from the far east
Yet these things have not moved his heart and so he has only moved to
survive
He has waited silently lost in thought seeking
Many are the dreams and many are the hours of solitude
When one day a young woman from a near by village came and sat next to
him
Still he waited though he was puzzled by her presense
She'd come at sun rise and she left at sunset never saying a word
After many weeks one morning he came to sit where he has sat for over a
year now
Much to his amazement she sat in his place staring at the sea
Finally he had to ask with hoarse voice that hadn't been used in ages
"What are you doing here, I have sat here for many moons waiting for my
sign"
Apon several moments she very shortly replied
"I am changing the very fabric of the world in which you cling"
More confused and than ever he stared at her, pondering her words
He spent the entire day and much of the moon's light thinking
As the moon began its downward wane he asked "why"
"All the thought in the world will not move a statue wasting away by the
sea
Nothing has moved you from this spot
After all these years I have grown tired of waiting
You seek something that can move you when you are the one that moves
Now you are moved and don't know what to do
Should you move on and find a new place in this world
Or perphaps shall you take a wait for things me to move to right things
again
Only to live your life in a circle, that can not end
That path will bring you and myself only pain and miseary"
So the young man did the only thing he could think of and kissed her
When his lips met hers she grabbed him and ran off the cliff
They were battered by the tide and carried out to sea and came up on a
shore
Together they began a new life and lived happily ever after somewhere
near Fugii
Up the ladder:
The truths of war
Down the ladder:
When old men die
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Posted: June 30, 2003 12:45 PM PDT; Last modified: July 1, 2003 7:16 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.7615943 Overall Rank: 446 Comments:
interesting
ha
Go suck a monkey's ass, you fucker
Hehe.. Is that the best you've got. Come on Insult me. Say something that is gonna make me upset. Rise to the challenge of being more than a simple ignorant layman. Cause if you can't do better than saying I should go suck your ass(which would probably leave me with some strange disease that they don't even have a name for yet) then your just a waste of time.
Go suck a donkey's ass, you fucker
Whats next an Elephant? Look just not gonna happen okay. I might be able to jump up his ass(if the smell wouldn't kill me first) but we bunnies just aren't made for that sort of thing. Besides, Didn't your mommy ever tell you not to play with your food?
It's 'bout time you took your sorry white ass out the projects, 'cause ain't no place 'round here for stinkin' ass bitch like yourself. My momma don't even come into this, so don't be talkin' no shit about shit you don't know shit about an' shit.
Shame really, your absolutly right. She cums on everything.
What might possibly be the moral to this story you ask? If you wait to
long life may pass you by. If you give up too soon you might miss it. More than likely what your looking for has been right beside you for awhile now and you have mearly been missing it. But most Importantly If your stupid enough to wait on a cliff side for a few years only someone as FUCKING NUTZ as you are is gonna come move your dumb ass.
This made me want to stand at the bottom of the sea. Way long, nuff said 5
I like long things, and this is REALLY long, have a 7 handsome.
definitely an 'other'
interesting, like an individuals log from the point of the observer, extra points for that. I think you could miss out the end bit explaining it, it is not really needed
Maybe, but I wanted make so that if your head was aching from trying to follow the story, then the point would be ovbious rather than taking a few days to let the meaning sink in.
Why would you put that last paragraph in? Are you so insecure you need to explain yourself explaining yoursef? Good God, it was fine up until that stab at humor.
Oh all right but just for you Horus. Say bye bye to the nice little explaination. Bye Bye.
Thankyou. now here's your treat.
woohoo. the explaination was a failure, dont miss it. the result, is actaully a thousand times better than the original.. now it has a shine and glitter. Now, you just need to fix the presentation of this thing and fix the running lines that run allover the page.
Fine Fine.
good good, ;D heres your blessing: 10 :)
love the end
You nonce.
You noticed. What do you want a cookie?
"A man sits like as though he were stone"
My head turned to stone when I read this.
There was alot of stones involved in this. Mostly being stoned. Imagine my suprise to ever see it in the best list. Its close to being one of my worst.
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I like the story you did spin out though, except for the insane "form" we have here.. your lines are running all over the place.. what purpose does that exactly serve? to make reading the work annoying enough as to drive people to become lazy and not read it?
Sing
Sing of
Sing of Nothing
Dance
Dance To
Dance to the Sound
*example ends*
True I'll rename it. The humor was in the simple spurt of common sense at the end. Its done in a format I call Steps but I'm sure it has a better name. I tired to leave out most emotion yet still be appealing, but with the difference in word processors, Its lost its steps and without them is much more confusing.