| Re: Passive Birth Control by http://mulberryfairy |
23-Aug-07/8:39 PM |
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Good to see you writing again :)
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| Re: Pledge by http://mulberryfairy |
23-Aug-07/8:38 PM |
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"I" absolutely adore this poem!
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| Re: She Crab by http://mulberryfairy |
11-Oct-04/9:11 AM |
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A gorgeous moment. The gendering of the crab is intersting. Are you making a personal statement or merely recounting an event?
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| Re: the small drop by richa |
26-Jan-04/10:50 AM |
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Wonderful, richa. Perhaps '..and weigh through it every angle'. I think it fits more with what you're getting at (or at least my simple understanding of your intent).
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| Re: Sequence by http://mulberryfairy |
26-Jan-04/10:38 AM |
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Strangely exposed. I don't like 'strangely' here. It implies that you are a confused observer to yourself - not really understanding what is going on around you. It has the effect of distancing you (and therefore the reader) from the scene. Focus on the the nature of the wound that exposes the brain tissue and derive your adjective in that manner.
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| Re: A Parable Of War by Caducus |
21-Nov-03/10:27 PM |
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| Re: a comment on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined |
10-Nov-03/12:11 PM |
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Actually I agree with INTRANSIT, I was merely echoing your sentiment in my own confusing way.
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| Re: Memoirs IV by http://mulberryfairy |
9-Nov-03/8:01 PM |
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I like your collection of snapshots. I didn't know they got hurricanes up in Maine, though. <~
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| Re: a comment on Greybie Blue by abecedarian |
9-Nov-03/5:17 PM |
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Can I sing to you? Sing to you?
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| Re: a comment on Greybie Blue by abecedarian |
8-Nov-03/7:35 PM |
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My terminal thanks to you
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| Re: a comment on Greybie Blue by abecedarian |
8-Nov-03/7:33 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Greybie Blue by abecedarian |
8-Nov-03/7:29 PM |
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You should know me by now horus. Aren't I always trying to say something?
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| Re: Saint Peggy Seeger by Retaliate |
4-Nov-03/10:41 PM |
Do a google search on 'Song of Choice' to get lyrics,
then 'Peggy Seeger' to see the author.
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| Re: a comment on The Santa Anna's fire and red sun by Bachus |
29-Oct-03/3:18 PM |
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I like your forecast better than mine: rain, rain, mudlside, catastrophic results. New landscape. Rebuilding on new unstable landscape. Rinse and repeat.
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| Re: The Santa Anna's fire and red sun by Bachus |
29-Oct-03/2:54 PM |
My prophetic soul! Remember I was bitching about how dry lake Arrowhead was ('Lake Arrowhead' Oct 19th, 2003)?
Good capture. Even in LA it looks like the fucking apocalypse, I can't imagine being at the place where the heart of the fire would be (if it had one).
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| Re: a comment on comment-ary by nentwined |
28-Oct-03/8:58 AM |
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well said (both your comment-ary and commentary)
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| Re: Right side by <~> |
24-Oct-03/4:21 PM |
Harmonic in its dissonance. Interesting, I like this description a great deal. It is a simple indication of an unresolved but accepted complexity.
My reading suggests the following change:
'a chorus harmonic in its six-legged dissonance,
never completely soothing the restlessness inside'
The second line reemphasizes the first I think (as opposed to contradicting it with a 'but').
Or maybe my reading was wrong - as can do.
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| Re: a comment on Three Fall by <~> |
24-Oct-03/4:07 PM |
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| Re: Backyard by <~> |
24-Oct-03/12:01 AM |
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Few things with a more solid aura than weather worn oak and iron.
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| Re: rainfall saga 7 by Bill Z Bub |
23-Oct-03/11:58 PM |
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Gonna need help Bill. smile 1, lure 1 , fingers 2, thundering 3, rain 5, at last 8 (intentional golden section? 1,1,2,3,5,8) but that's all I got.
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