| Re: a comment on Andrew part II by Spindle |
22-Dec-04/2:45 PM |
Not to yell at you or anything, but I would just ike to comment on the fact that whenever someone writes a sad poem people patronize them, saying that at least they don't have cancer or AIDS or something, and whenever someone writes a happy poem they are called naive and fake. How can you win like that?
Oh, and just so you know, this peom wasn't just about losing my virginity. I hope that's not how it came across to everyone.
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| Re: a comment on A Poem by BigB |
7-Sep-04/8:50 AM |
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Ok, if you were in such a rush why didn't you just not finish or submit the poem? Wait until you have time to make it the right way.
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| Re: Intervention by livingcanvas |
10-May-04/4:14 PM |
asking 'Could I possibly be next?'
This sounds rather choppy. You may want to work on your rhyme scheme. All in all I liked it
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| Re: a comment on The Kings of Paradise by Spindle |
10-Apr-04/8:52 AM |
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Excuse me, but I have had some experience. I never said I was the one doing the drugs, did I?
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| Re: a comment on The Kings of Paradise by Spindle |
9-Apr-04/9:10 PM |
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"a marijuana?" Can we just stick to what this site is suppose to be about; reading other peoples' works and critiquing them instead of making petty insults towards personality flaws you think you find in the two sentences you read of a comment by them?
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| Re: a comment on The Kings of Paradise by Spindle |
8-Apr-04/6:56 PM |
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| Re: a comment on The Kings of Paradise by Spindle |
8-Apr-04/12:25 PM |
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Marijuana. "...roam jesters in lace/dancing round like the smoke in the sky." Get it?
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| Re: a comment on The Kings of Paradise by Spindle |
7-Apr-04/9:01 PM |
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Actually, it's about drugs.
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| Re: A Little Further by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
7-Apr-04/8:08 PM |
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| Re: a comment on It Won't Last Long by Spindle |
2-Apr-04/8:08 PM |
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well, that's kind of how I felt about it too at first. He's my first boyfriend and I had no idea what I was doing; I was just going through the motions (only at first, obviously)
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| Re: Red Dress Wearing One Boot Cowboy by Lenore |
2-Apr-04/7:45 PM |
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| Re: love comes but once by francis nor capule |
2-Apr-04/7:35 PM |
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hehe, you caught me in a good mood. I just left my boyfriend's house and i miss him :-P being sappy can be fun
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| Re: ode to summer dreams by jsd |
2-Apr-04/7:25 PM |
"wheels roll and i'm on my way to feeling whole" is ackward but I loved "under dusklit skies/entranced by golden eyes" keep it up :)
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| Re: PEOPLE. (Debut) by Doc |
2-Apr-04/7:15 PM |
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| Re: Summers Breath on my neck by unouluvme |
2-Apr-04/7:11 PM |
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mmmmmmmm :-) very nice. It makes me long for summer
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| Re: A Dangling Poo by zodiac |
31-Mar-04/7:18 PM |
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I was going to be nice and give you a one, but that gay comment lost you another point. If you're going to have some random, unintelligent statement like that in your poetry, you should at least have the decency to make it a somewhat good poem.
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| Re: Espera by GekoHawaii |
29-Mar-04/10:11 AM |
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Interested in being an architect are we? (angles?) Hehe, and you forgot the s' silly, :-p Oh, guess who....ahahahahaha
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