Re: Fish by http://findingwater	4-Aug-03/7:50 PM
Ha ha... So did my date. Her chest smelled of the Sea. Her trap of fish.
Re: ooohhh...subs by Myte342	4-Aug-03/9:51 PM
You're an obvious "Lap snorkel".
Re: He's Dead You Bastards (for zzinia) by scitz	5-Aug-03/11:47 AM
"His girlfriend left him for some guy who could drive," Quite possibly the funniest line imaginable. But if you destroy the Angel, I'll have nothing to do?
Re: A parking lot, a smoke, and the pleasure of being alone by thepinkbunnyofdoom	5-Aug-03/11:52 AM
Your first statement is powerful, you need to have her with eyebrows and fourteen or twelve toes by the end, or you'll story will die, worthless. Once again your first line sets the pace, so deliver the goods that's what we're interested in. Why, How, who, where, we know when and who you are already, you mentioned ghost town so get there man.
Re: Joe is Dead Now by Freethinker1602	5-Aug-03/11:56 AM
Seems like a cleaner edit.
Re: Popularity by Ditchamal	5-Aug-03/12:45 PM
Neither, it's Stridex.
Re: Summer by MaliqaTara	5-Aug-03/1:52 PM
This is such a great poem.
Re: Palm Field Park by SupremeDreamer	5-Aug-03/10:06 PM
Or back on.
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Aug-03/10:09 PM
That's it. I quit.
Re: letting off angry emotions by LosT SykoPath	5-Aug-03/10:36 PM
Murder is for the brave, knaive.
Re: The Belgian Bookworm [revised] by DreamerSupreme	6-Aug-03/4:30 PM
"of ice colliding with glass in that grapy ocean" I would consider rewording this with an emphasis on losing grapy and ocean. "Your face would be in a book as you slowly ate. Michael Crichton, Dick Francis, Clive Cussler, and Tom Clancy- Just a few of your favorite authors in your large library." Hee he, you are a riot! yes, the library... Sounds stocked from rafters to sagging bottom shelf with such power hitters as Sidney Sheldon and Dean Koontz with a dash of Ken Folliet. You are too cute. Great title.
Re: Angel by abecedarian	6-Aug-03/4:32 PM
Due to my condition. I must request you stop with this nonsense about cherubian intervention immediately.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Aug-03/4:34 PM
Speaking of poof where have you been?
Re: Playa been caught in their games. (revised/new) by LuckyJoe	10-Aug-03/4:00 PM
I would add a penny and a monkey named Lenny, Spruce.
Re: \The Moment/ by Son Of A Bitch	17-Aug-03/11:16 AM
What exactly is a carcase of snow?
Re: Love-Anemic by dragonfly	20-Aug-03/1:09 PM
This is a lyric and it's barely a seven.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Aug-03/1:16 PM
I sort of liked this.
Re: Provacation by J.B. Manning	20-Aug-03/1:44 PM
Keep on trucking.
Re: Wha you funkin wan? by ==Doylum	20-Aug-03/4:54 PM
Manuensis with a side of hot musturd.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Aug-03/7:03 PM
Yes, I know, how do bald people White Lion fans even grow there hair out like that anymore anyway? Is all of that stringy dry blond hair from the sides of their heads and the backs of their necks? I'd wear a bandanna too. If I looked like that and hailed from Jersey. I skipped the ending, because it sucked like plecostamus.