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\The Moment/ (Free verse) by Son Of A Bitch
Eyes colder than the carcase of snow, The last goodbye I told her, The sunrise I sold her, Challenged me as I was about to go. She took off the ring I bought her, And spoke of the thing I taught her, The thing that controlled her, And the joy it would bring, each time I'd hold her. Now just a wished upon star, soon to be ashes. I felt fulfilled, as love spilled from a cheating, beating heart, that intensified with each tear she cried, then suddenly vanish. In love you can fly, you can live a moment you believe lasts forever, But once you fall, Like Icarus you die. So near to a dream, a clear final scream, from the man with a girl, the clam with a pearl, Take a slice of my life add it too drink, a husband and wife baby what do you think? I'd rather take the jump and fly, And live the moment before I die, But what a moment.

Up the ladder: venus (revised)
Down the ladder: Unloving Stranger

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10116
Posted: August 15, 2003 10:59 AM PDT; Last modified: August 17, 2003 9:44 AM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] Shardik @ 24.126.113.154 | 17-Aug-03/11:16 AM | Reply
What exactly is a carcase of snow?
[n/a] Son Of A Bitch @ 195.92.168.165 > Shardik | 18-Aug-03/1:57 AM | Reply
Its ice. Snow (beauty) turns to ice (dangerous)
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > Son Of A Bitch | 20-Aug-03/8:45 PM | Reply
Did you mean carcass?
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 17-Aug-03/5:32 PM | Reply
Do you feel safe?

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I do.
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