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Free verse № 60675

\The Moment/

Member since 2003 · Posted 15 Aug 2003 · Edited 17 Aug 2003 · 4 comments

Eyes colder than the carcase of snow, The last goodbye I told her, The sunrise I sold her, Challenged me as I was about to go. She took off the ring I bought her, And spoke of the thing I taught her, The thing that controlled her, And the joy it would bring, each time I'd hold her. Now just a wished upon star, soon to be ashes. I felt fulfilled, as love spilled from a cheating, beating heart, that intensified with each tear she cried, then suddenly vanish. In love you can fly, you can live a moment you believe lasts forever, But once you fall, Like Icarus you die. So near to a dream, a clear final scream, from the man with a girl, the clam with a pearl, Take a slice of my life add it too drink, a husband and wife baby what do you think? I'd rather take the jump and fly, And live the moment before I die, But what a moment.

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[n/a] Shardik 17-Aug-03/11:16 AM Reply
What exactly is a carcase of snow?
[n/a] Son Of A Bitch › Shardik 18-Aug-03/1:57 AM Reply
Its ice. Snow (beauty) turns to ice (dangerous)
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> › Son Of A Bitch 20-Aug-03/8:45 PM Reply
Did you mean carcass?
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> 17-Aug-03/5:32 PM Reply
Do you feel safe?

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I do.