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venus (revised) (Free verse) by princesszoe
cloud girl shows her knickers to the world
why? asks the teacher
venus waves her doll at other girls
edges not defined, most boundaries out of time
the little minds grow slowly day on day
till tuesday when miss cloud girl floats away
wednesday comes and venus stands quite still
wanders just where she put her pills?
thinks hard and vacant
itâs a fat chance but she takes it
tries anything to make it feel truth real
thursdayâs here and venus lost her doll
the timeâs hard gone and taken toll
the march of life has left itâs hole
still venus stays and tries another hand
of poker, and with dash of sober bland
tries to make it with a man
lets go her reigns and stable gains
no hedging bets at this late stage
chips fall to deep and bleeding red black age
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10120
Posted: August 13, 2003 6:43 PM PDT; Last modified: August 13, 2003 6:43 PM PDT
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