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Joe is Dead Now

Member since 2003 · Posted 19 Jul 2003 · Edited 19 Nov 2003 · 10 comments

That smile meant so much to me The way you smiled comforted me My hand seemed to fit so perfectly in yours Now the only thing I'll see of you Is a tiny picture I'll keep close Close to my heart I won't believe that you are gone It's too much to accept Because we'd planned forever You knew who I was I loved you and now I can't say it I love you and now that I know what tomorrow brings I'll remember you Forever and think about Who you were every day Stay close to me Joe And I'll never forget you jmv

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[9] thepinkbunnyofdoom 19-Jul-03/2:46 PM Reply

Touching, but more details please. Why is this Joe So important to you, Who the hell is he? That type of stuff.

[n/a] Freethinker1602 › thepinkbunnyofdoom 19-Jul-03/7:08 PM Reply

Joe is my late boy friend. I am still quite in love with him. he is known to many as Redneck Joe. My friend, Jessie, introduced us. He died while he was at work. He was working on July 19 at the Country Club right off of Bradock road. The cherry picker he and Pete were in tipped. I knew pete too. He was 19.

[9] thepinkbunnyofdoom › Freethinker1602 20-Jul-03/12:45 AM Reply

Okay I was refering to the poem, not to me. Make it apparent in your writing not in commentary. Side comments mean nothing as a poet, its the body of the poem that matters.

[7] <~> › Freethinker1602 5-Aug-03/7:30 AM Reply

imp, if you worked that into the lines of the poem, the sorrow would cut deeper.

[n/a] horus8 19-Jul-03/7:27 PM Reply

Jesus, you're good. You should write eulogies for a living. The funeral companies would love you. For every person they buried your poetry would kill nine more in the process.

Try flowers, they smell good and contrast well against black back drops.

[10] sk8rs_rule_all 5-Aug-03/6:58 AM Reply

Wow...I had a bf named joe, and i hated him very muhc but now i have learned to accept waht he did to me and now we are just friends, this poem is great. Im not only giving it a 10 bcuz i had an ex- named joe but even if i hadent had an ex- named joe i'd still give it a 10 bcuz it has a light to it that i cant explain

[7] <~> 5-Aug-03/7:31 AM Reply

p.s.--sorry for your loss.

[7] Shardik 5-Aug-03/11:56 AM Reply

Seems like a cleaner edit.

[9] ShaNoN+960317485 19-Nov-03/10:32 PM Reply

May god rest his sole & give you peace of mind

[7] Shardik 20-Nov-03/7:57 PM Reply

A better edit.