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Joe is Dead Now (Free verse) by Freethinker1602 That smile meant so much to me
The way you smiled comforted me
My hand seemed to fit so perfectly in yours
Now the only thing I'll see of you
Is a tiny picture I'll keep close
Close to my heart
I won't believe that you are gone
It's too much to accept
Because we'd planned forever
You knew who I was
I loved you and now
I can't say it
I love you and now that
I know what tomorrow brings
I'll remember you
Forever and think about
Who you were every day
Stay close to me Joe
And I'll never forget you
jmv
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.2
Posted: July 19, 2003 1:05 PM PDT; Last modified: November 19, 2003 7:38 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.1430435 Overall Rank: 5373 Comments:
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thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223
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19-Jul-03/2:46 PM
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Touching, but more details please. Why is this Joe So important to you, Who the hell is he? That type of stuff.
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Freethinker1602 @ 68.48.88.129
> thepinkbunnyofdoom
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19-Jul-03/7:08 PM
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Joe is my late boy friend. I am still quite in love with him. he is known to many as Redneck Joe. My friend, Jessie, introduced us. He died while he was at work. He was working on July 19 at the Country Club right off of Bradock road. The cherry picker he and Pete were in tipped. I knew pete too. He was 19.
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thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223
> Freethinker1602
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20-Jul-03/12:45 AM
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Okay I was refering to the poem, not to me. Make it apparent in your writing not in commentary. Side comments mean nothing as a poet, its the body of the poem that matters.
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<~> @ 167.206.181.179
> Freethinker1602
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5-Aug-03/7:30 AM
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imp, if you worked that into the lines of the poem, the sorrow would cut deeper.
Jesus, you're good. You should write eulogies for a living. The funeral companies would love you. For every person they buried your poetry would kill nine more in the process.
Try flowers, they smell good and contrast well against black back drops.
Wow...I had a bf named joe, and i hated him very muhc but now i have learned to accept waht he did to me and now we are just friends, this poem is great. Im not only giving it a 10 bcuz i had an ex- named joe but even if i hadent had an ex- named joe i'd still give it a 10 bcuz it has a light to it that i cant explain
p.s.--sorry for your loss.
Seems like a cleaner edit.
May god rest his sole & give you peace of mind
A better edit.
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