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MAY DARKNESS BEFALL ALL OF YOU WHO READ THIS SITE AND DEATH BE YOUR SWEET REWARD!! In the darkness they come howling at the night Born of fresh blood and a devils sight Weeping at the night's full moonlight Oh what a ghastly sight! Death on every street corner light Hanging there and waiting for their new plight Gazing out with death filled eyes upon the forgotten night Never seeing what was there or what was right Now they sink to the holes of hell Never looking back on the choas and maime they caused.

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.2
Weighted score: 5.1430435
Overall Rank: 5373
Posted: July 24, 2003 11:32 PM PDT; Last modified: July 24, 2003 11:32 PM PDT
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[n/a] richa @ 81.86.238.103 | 24-Jul-03/11:40 PM | Reply
If you are going to use the same rhyme sound for every line you should probably not repeat words night and sight. The words are a bit simple too.

Check out 'I am the gayest' i think by Dark angel for an example of this form (in best list)
[n/a] Southern_Bell @ 209.214.109.169 > richa | 24-Jul-03/11:41 PM | Reply
ok thanks. besides i was thinking of editing it any way.
[n/a] walrus8 @ 195.157.153.253 > Southern_Bell | 25-Jul-03/9:28 AM | Reply
bite, blight, bright, cite, fight, flight, fright, height, kite, knight, light, might, plight, quite, right, sight, site, sleight, slight, spite, sprite, tight, trite, white, write, alight, bomb site, box kite, brake light, contrite, delight, despite, dog bite, egg white, excite, first light, flea bite, forthright, gang fight, green light, head blight, hold tight, ignite, incite, indict, indite, invite, in flight, in sight, knife fight, land site, large white, late blight, leaf blight, onsite, outright, own right, polite, put right, rear light, recite, red light, rewrite, sit tight, stage fright, take flight, tonight, upright, uptight, white knight ... etc
[n/a] Southern_Bell @ 209.214.109.198 > walrus8 | 25-Jul-03/12:54 PM | Reply
Hey thanks for all the ryhming schemes i might use one later on.
[n/a] DurtKL @ 68.75.23.103 > Southern_Bell | 25-Jul-03/1:07 PM | Reply
lol hurry or i'll steal it
[n/a] Caducus @ 62.105.119.105 | 25-Jul-03/8:05 AM | Reply
get rid of new plight, plight will suffice. Cut the digression of the obvious lines and your getting there
[3] cyan9 @ 217.40.63.105 | 18-Jan-06/9:37 AM | Reply
The statement is too true, but the poem is crap.
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