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MAY DARKNESS BEFALL ALL OF YOU WHO READ THIS SITE AND DEATH BE YOUR SWEET REWARD!! In the darkness they come howling at the night Born of fresh blood and a devils sight Weeping at the night's full moonlight Oh what a ghastly sight! Death on every street corner light Hanging there and waiting for their new plight Gazing out with death filled eyes upon the forgotten night Never seeing what was there or what was right Now they sink to the holes of hell Never looking back on the choas and maime they caused.

richa 24-Jul-03/11:40 PM
If you are going to use the same rhyme sound for every line you should probably not repeat words night and sight. The words are a bit simple too.

Check out 'I am the gayest' i think by Dark angel for an example of this form (in best list)




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